Flight of the Kingfisher

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Flight of the Kingfisher

Post by gooseberry » August 20th, 2012, 6:22 am

Bullet blue on
whirring wings,
scores a river's
wrinkled face
of diamond rings,
that flash and gleam
in a languid breeze,
below the arms
of dozing willow trees.

The minnows in
their teeming hoards,
corralled by perch
that lunge and tease,
like a banded swarm
of aquatic bees,
in a scaled and
feathered brotherhood,
beneath the kingfisher's
grateful ease.

But harpoon blue
in plunging pleasure,
breaks the truce in
search of treasure,
scattering perch
and minnow in
equal measure;
he shatters the
water's crystal glass,
in a furious explosion
of liquid shards,
and emerging in a
myriad burst of stars,
tosses a minnow
with a flip and juggle,
in nature's brutal
eternal struggle.


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Re: Flight of the Kingfisher

Post by Jahaliel » September 3rd, 2012, 11:55 am

A wonderful descriptive fluid poem that I enjoyed each and every word of. Lovely.


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Re: Flight of the Kingfisher

Post by JingleBelle » September 3rd, 2012, 4:18 pm

This is so, so beautiful. Your description of the Kingfisher and the minnows is both accurate and creative. This poem is, as whitman said, "simply excellent."

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Flower of poetic excellence.


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Re: Flight of the Kingfisher

Post by SirFleshwound » September 3rd, 2012, 9:32 pm

Your prose is perfect as it describes this interplay of natures struggles. Beautiful. So many amazing metaphors here.



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Re: Flight of the Kingfisher

Post by Hem » September 4th, 2012, 10:41 pm

Elegantly and excellently expressed poetry. I found it very easy to visualise the scene.


Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement. ~ Christopher Fry
Poetry is a deal of joy and pain and wonder, with a dash of the dictionary. ~ Kahlil Gibran

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Re: Flight of the Kingfisher

Post by AnIdeasman » September 5th, 2012, 6:29 am

a worthy spotlightee, congrats



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Re: Flight of the Kingfisher

Post by gooseberry » September 5th, 2012, 9:45 am

Thanks guys you are all very kind.


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Re: Flight of the Kingfisher

Post by Ladywildalice » September 5th, 2012, 1:43 pm

Congratulations on the spotlight. This is an excellent example of talent, pure and simple, and as such I am most envious. Beautiful work, beautiful


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Re: Flight of the Kingfisher

Post by everhopeful » September 6th, 2012, 7:37 am

I particularly admire how this poem manages to capture movement with a lot of descriptive flair and precision. There are so many excellent metaphors in this that you have really brought the scene to life, and the subtle use of end rhyme helps to keep this cohesive and flowing.
Superb writing, congratulations on the spotlight!



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Re: Flight of the Kingfisher

Post by Sasha » September 6th, 2012, 9:51 am

That's a breathtaking piece! and I just love the imagery, and the seamless flow, grabbing the reader till the end. Fantastic! and I throroughly enjoyed!

Congratulation on the deserved Spotlight!

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