Candlelight at Candlemass

[cariusal]

Candlelight at Candlemass


Shadows shrink the room
We share togetherness
In a halo of candlelight
Enclosed in our fireside world

Soft light from the flickering flame
Touches your cheek with rose
As the old dog belly crawls closer
Completing the intimate circle

We gaze into the fire pictures
A sombre landscape of embers
Blackened outcrops, grey ash plains
Lava glow under the fracture cracks

Wood smoke tugs the senses
Plucks the strings of memory
Children again in a long ago home
Wrapped tight in warmth and love

The candle dies in a wax waterfall
I reach for you, hold you close
The dancing shadows join the embrace
As raindrops beat on the window lattice

[everhopeful]

You have invested a lot into the scene-setting descriptions of this one, and it works very well while still retaining enough of what really makes the scene so special, the couple who create the shadows and are highlighted in the candle's glow. There is a little bit of a melancholic edge in the third stanza, but I like how you've used that turn in order to show love underpins and holds everything together.

[musie]

I have to agree with Mick in that you have set a very nice scene here with a circle of love an fond memorie's....Truly enjoyed the reading of this....Musie

[Chryseis]

Seconded Mick and musie. Beautiful scene -- a heartwarming moment and piece, if I may say. Nicely penned, thanks for sharing - Chryseis

[karrie]

Such beautiful imagery! Congratulations on the much deserved spotlight!

[Zojourn]

Yes, beautiful imagery! Great depiction of a soul-warming scene...a well versed (w)rite.

Truly enjoyed.
~Z

[flux]

Everhopeful mentions this poem's strongest point, and I agree, it's the time and energy you've invested in describing the scene that gives this poem life.

[inflames]

I love the final stanza. Such a wonderful beautiful way to end the poem. This is a wonderful poem. Congrats on your spotlight!

[allmirth]

This is such a lovely scene filled with delicate detail and infused with emotional depth. Congratulations on a well deserved spotlight.

Thanks so much for sharing.
Mirthy

[jainrohit]

You stretch a small moment into a picturesque magnificence. Each and every line has a sensuous touch to it .. amber , rainbow drops etc are just out of this world ...... a well deserved spotlight ...

[songofmeadow]

Beautifully descriptive and a well earned spotlight, and deserving of further reads mx

[cariusal]

Thank so much for your kind comments on this little poem.
It happens to be based on a real event and is one of the very few personal poems I write. We were lucky to buy a country cottage soon after we were married (they are much sought after now and way out of our price range today).
The interior is usually stripped out and subjected to a massive makeover but we decided against doing that and have kept as much of the originality that is possible for today’s modern living.

Candlemass is a lesser known holy day on February 2nd and my wife suggested that we spent it by candlelight as it was celebrated many years ago, so this poem relates to that evening.

Thank you all once again.
Cari.

[Dew]

An obscenely serene scene! Congrats on spotlighting! - dew

[rupertpupkin]

Hi Cari.This is a wonderful piece of writing.It oozes atmosphere and warmth with more than a hint of nostalgia and a melancholly edge too.Perfect score from me and well done on the most deserving spotlight,Sean.

[dornicks]

A well deserved piece for the Spotlight. Thanks for the memories and a good read,

dornicks

[Ladywildalice]

Such a beautiful and emotive write so well deserving of the Spotlight. Congratulations.

[tangerinepie]

The poem had a warmth and intimacy that was very pleasurable.The format was structured brilliantly to bring the reader into the scenario.Great job and congrats..Tangie..

[Simran]

I can just say I can't agree more with all that has been already said! Congrats for the well earned Spotlight! Looking forward to read more of your work
Simran :-)

[enaeem12]

A wonderful write that was both captivating and full of detailed imagery ^^ AWESOME~