Revetment ~ by StillContagious & everhopeful

[rupertpupkin]

Hi, really enjoyed this so much. A brilliant co write and most deserving of a spotlight. Do you have to arm wrestle for it or something? Nice one, Sean.

[everhopeful]

Many thanks for all of your kind words and the honour of the spotlight from StillContagious and myself.

@ rupertpupkin - haha, cheers Sean, we're happy to share without resorting to the arm wrestling!

[SirFleshwound]

Read aloud this collaboration explodes with delicious shapes and sounds. The opening stanza starts a theme of effervescent energy that rises and falls throughout. A compelling and captivating write. Congratulation to you both. Michael.

[garic]

Sure - you write a poem about leaving the past behind you, and it gets spotlighted over a year later!

Really enjoyed the read and the relief of the tone change in the last stanza - like a resolving chord or popping a stubborn pimple.

_{(after all the accolades, finding something original to write in this response was the challenge here)!}

[Josie]

I enjoyed the pattern of the two word line followed by the three longer lines. The fact that a space was not left after each one helped this reader to see the ingoing and outgoing tide, The collaboration was highlighted by the names of the poets, the awful pain and despair by ' StillContagious' and the redeeming ending by 'everhopeful'. I could not identify who wrote what, so it was seemless in my mind.

It was very painful to endure the verbally illustrated suffering. I wanted to shout to the victim not to press on the bruises. It is best to let go of the pain, not try and tickle it back into remembrance, and move on with life. Don't look back until the bruising is gone.
The part of the final line 'let yesterday stay beached' is the perfect ending, especially since the yesterday is so brutal to the victim.
Josie