I am a walking brochure

[MBW]

Smiling eye contact, wave and beckon
Standing up to demonstrate effort.
Position body not too close,
And angled not too head on.
Sweet talk but don't intimidate.
Self-deprecation, make observations.
A hint of history, then the tools of attack
Rattled off from the top of my dome.
Fall in the voice with a dark statistic,
Reasoning it should not be this way.
Then what we do, and abundantly
Excited and passionate, quicken the pace.
Then down through the valley of wretchedness come
Where ninety per cent have nothing. But we
Have new goals and new dreams and we give and empower
The forgotten, the dying, the homeless, the young
With second chances, with tools and training
Turning waste into industry, so schools and communities
Can flourish with students, and people can work
And people can live on a more even level.
Do you love our great work? But as you might imagine
We can't work alone: we need your help;
It's just a quick form I fill in; you get a newsletter quarterly
To keep you updated; and most importantly
You'll be saving lots of lives.
What do you say- can we get you on board?

[sparky21737]

Ohh I like this poem. The first half of the poem had a dark and hopeless undertone conveying the harsh reality of life. The second half was optimistic, hopeful and imploring other people to help others less fortunate. This was well written and handled well for an OM piece. Thanks for sharing

Sparky

[Dew]

I even loved the title...as a 'consultant' I really AM a walking brochure and I basically sell 'me' all day long (don't go there!) I read an article about FBI informal interrogations and how they use body language to manipulate peoples trust. Instead of horror I felt great curiosity and experimented a bit (not for evulz! I promise!) I fixed on the idea of self-sale and couldn't escape it throughout the poem LOL! I loved that last line...so creepily inviting! awesome! - dew

[JASON]

How much?? That is all I want to know before answering your final question
and my answer would still be the same... Not today!

[Lonnie]

Interesting, but vague

The theme is good but the effect of the whole piece is lessened by its lack of flow and form. Still, a good read none the less!

[Ladywildalice]

Despite the fact your write does not easily "slip" into the established "form and flow" of some reader's expectation, I found it extremely enlightening. It reveals something of your inner self that I don't believe you share often. And it reads like an advertisement for a Jim Jones camp-a-thon. Warning: Visitors, do NOT drink the Kool-ade.......I really liked this, but then again, I used to sell things door-to-door and am used to putting on that Cheshire smile and saying "May I put you down for 1?"
Congrats again, much enjoyed.

[MBW]

Thank you all, and thank you for the spotlight :D. And Lonnie, I agree it is vague and lacks form and flow but keep in mind please that it is only an OM piece and therefore not near as polished as it could be!

[Josie]

This is a stunning rendition of the door to door salesman or the phone call you hope you don't answer, minus the first four lines. On second thought, phones are now letting you see the caller. This could be updated to include the internet type selling that drags on and on before they reveal the price or the product. I enjoyed your OM piece. Congratulations on the TPS recognition.

[inflames]

The title to this really caught my eye! Wonderful poem. Really descriptive. Thanks for sharing and congrats on the spotlight!

[sparky21737]

Stopping by to congratulate you on a well deserved spotlight. Loved it the first time I read it and loved it more the second. Congrats!!!!!

Sparky