dft n blnd

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A.k.ChaosDream
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dft n blnd

Post by A.k.ChaosDream » July 11th, 2015, 5:47 pm

in the fires of the lonely pit
burns away the love you forgot to spit upon -
when you left for glory in the Universe
you forgot to check me for my pulse -

and the crickets cringe at my shrieks
spending time between the open rifts -

feeling tired of using the same motifs
i'm a liar but can't kill this lie i live -
in the dark, your hand i try to grasp
but you're nothing more than scented wind -

demons calling from within my soul
im still choosing if i should let go -
i still shuffle grief and grins and gloom
bested by myselves i fight the bloom -
where's that madness that's supposed to take
all my senses, all my memories, all that fate -
it has promised me release from all this pain
but it only brought me more shame to my name -
in the darkness, angels try to hug
underneath red lips, tho', i can see their fangs -
paint of white drips down their wings
it's so fake i wonder why they bothered at all -

Soil still tried to eat my feet
but my running's faster then it chews


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I'm Chaos, Luv' -
hate me with my
Pain and throw me back
to sleep -


finally - the darkness lightened up a shade - after ages spreading it across my sanity[/center]

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Post by seraph1420 » July 12th, 2015, 8:12 am

I am in awe by such painful darkness. My favorite,

"paint of white drips down their wings"

Such brilliance! Beautiful

Seraph



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Re: dft n blnd

Post by candlewitch » July 13th, 2015, 11:14 am

hello,

such vivid imagery depicting the sorrow and loss! but my favorite lines are the last two...keeping yourself from being devoured!!!

always, Cat


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Post by JASON » July 13th, 2015, 1:56 pm

keep running Alex, don't let it take you ...
What does the title mean? daft n blind ?



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Post by A.k.ChaosDream » July 13th, 2015, 1:58 pm

thx Seraph, Cat !
JASON - yep...you got it !
ty for reading me


where i post stuff/bio
I'm Chaos, Luv' -
hate me with my
Pain and throw me back
to sleep -


finally - the darkness lightened up a shade - after ages spreading it across my sanity[/center]

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Post by SongUnsung » July 16th, 2015, 3:35 pm

This was a great piece. It had a lot of depth and the emotion was wonderfully conveyed. I really enjoyed reading it.


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Post by Ladywildalice » October 11th, 2015, 8:40 pm

Congratulations on the Spotlight. The pain in life can drive you daft and blind. It is a way to cope, to wriggle through the slime and come out still breathing. Aptly painful, this read is tactile in its anger, frustration, and angst, as well as a sense of resignation that this is what it is and I just need to keep ahead of it. Well done and much enjoyed. Again, congrats.


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Post by dornicks » October 13th, 2015, 2:26 pm

I loved the last two line, of your piece, a fitting end to a sad and painful tale. Congratulations on the Spotlight,

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Post by riversidepoet » October 17th, 2015, 12:37 pm

wonderfully written, so many great lines, "i still shuffle grief and grins and gloom" so captivating to read, wondering what great line is coming next, thanks for sharing, may God bless



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Post by A.k.ChaosDream » October 31st, 2015, 4:16 pm

thank you all for taking your time
and thank you for the spotlight even if i feel undeserving
cheers all !
A.
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where i post stuff/bio
I'm Chaos, Luv' -
hate me with my
Pain and throw me back
to sleep -


finally - the darkness lightened up a shade - after ages spreading it across my sanity[/center]

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