Don't..
- parkayaapravesh
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Don’t touch me,
my skin will scream for hours
and my bones will drive me mad
with their angry rattling
the nights where I sleep alone
Don’t say my name,
my ears will bleed
to hear the cadence of your whispers
and the texture of the word
off your tongue
Don’t kiss me,
My mouth will shrivel dry
And refuse to bend
Unless it is allowed
to meld with yours
Don’t love me,
My heart will grow claws
And rake at my ribcage
Just so that it comes
Within inches of yours
Don’t look at me,
My body will turn numb
Heart to a stone and
My breath a rasp,
Until your eyes fall
Upon me again
Let me go,
Set me free,
So that I may stop drowning
in the wilderness of my agony
my skin will scream for hours
and my bones will drive me mad
with their angry rattling
the nights where I sleep alone
Don’t say my name,
my ears will bleed
to hear the cadence of your whispers
and the texture of the word
off your tongue
Don’t kiss me,
My mouth will shrivel dry
And refuse to bend
Unless it is allowed
to meld with yours
Don’t love me,
My heart will grow claws
And rake at my ribcage
Just so that it comes
Within inches of yours
Don’t look at me,
My body will turn numb
Heart to a stone and
My breath a rasp,
Until your eyes fall
Upon me again
Let me go,
Set me free,
So that I may stop drowning
in the wilderness of my agony
~ppk
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Re: Don't..
This is beautiful.
"Though my soul may set in darkness, it will rise in perfect light;
I have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night."
Sarah Williams
I have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night."
Sarah Williams
- Newman
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Re: Don't..
what we need from the other person to get over them is never what we want.. your poem holds hurt as a glass holds water.
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Re: Don't..
Completely dumbfounded at what seemed to be a personal request for space, that became so much more, as though the author doesn't trust themselves to deal with the emotions without going overboard perhaps. Experiences can leave us scarred and sick, but someone will almost always come around with some medicine. Cheers Parkaya and welcome to TPS! - Dan
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Re: Don't..
I keep coming back to this.
I especially liked this stanza:
"Don’t love me,
My heart will grow claws
And rake at my ribcage
Just so that it comes
Within inches of yours"
I love the concept of the heart as wild and even violent. This really speaks to me!
I especially liked this stanza:
"Don’t love me,
My heart will grow claws
And rake at my ribcage
Just so that it comes
Within inches of yours"
I love the concept of the heart as wild and even violent. This really speaks to me!
"Though my soul may set in darkness, it will rise in perfect light;
I have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night."
Sarah Williams
I have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night."
Sarah Williams
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Re: Don't..
I can feel the depression in this, nicely described. Keep on writing! :)
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- parkayaapravesh
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Re: Don't..
scribble, this particular stanza always seems like i saw it in a dream or something.. i can never entirely own it. but i own the sentiment for sure.. thank you so much for your comment..
scribble wrote:I keep coming back to this.
I especially liked this stanza:
"Don’t love me,
My heart will grow claws
And rake at my ribcage
Just so that it comes
Within inches of yours"
I love the concept of the heart as wild and even violent. This really speaks to me!
~ppk
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Re: Don't..
enjoyed this detailed write and how you developed each stanza. Great job!! congrats.
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Re: Don't..
Don't pass go, don't collect R200 - move straight to the spotlight !!
I suppose that's the way to roll when joining a new site??
CONGRATULATIONS!! this was wonderfully written
I suppose that's the way to roll when joining a new site??
CONGRATULATIONS!! this was wonderfully written
- parkayaapravesh
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Re: Don't..
wow everyone, thank you so much for the spotlight!!?!! and the comments!!! It is terribly unexpected for sure. i'm sorry i'm still trying to get the hang of this forum, but am definitely feeling all warm and fuzzy all over.. (could be the two glasses of red wine :P ) Much Much Appreciated.
~ppk
- parkayaapravesh
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Re: Don't..
newman, all my poems seem to burst forth from this mysterious place inside.. vexing because i don't have easy access to it, till the glass fills to a brim and flows over. thats why i cant call myself a poet ever.. :( im just a conduit.Newman wrote:what we need from the other person to get over them is never what we want.. your poem holds hurt as a glass holds water.
newman
~ppk
- parkayaapravesh
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thank you Jason.. i must say, totally unexpected..JASON wrote:Don't pass go, don't collect R200 - move straight to the spotlight !!
I suppose that's the way to roll when joining a new site??
CONGRATULATIONS!! this was wonderfully written
~ppk
- parkayaapravesh
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Re: Don't..
i keep waiting dan, in the meantime, i have people like you, :) thank you,dwells wrote:Completely dumbfounded at what seemed to be a personal request for space, that became so much more, as though the author doesn't trust themselves to deal with the emotions without going overboard perhaps. Experiences can leave us scarred and sick, but someone will almost always come around with some medicine. Cheers Parkaya and welcome to TPS! - Dan
~ppk