Inked

[TheManInTheSuit]

Inked

I left my daughter
to her young volition
Not much a father
with your mother missin'
And im feelin'-- God is optimism
So emptiness is just as filling
When he takes everything

Woe is life
be home on time
I can't face
your mother's eyes
That showed me everything

Oh they're remindin' me
of what could never be
'neath the cloud of heaven's shame

And so I let you go
yes I let you know
I can't be your anything

I watched you grow up
without my love
'Til the day brought rain
and the rivers ran
and waned with mud
That tattooed everything

And I inked your life
And your mama's eyes
Upon the face
of what would never change

Oh
all I see
Is all the ink
Of what was everything

[Valentine]

A very sad write..especially for an innocent child..Did you mean she had eyes just like her mothers and that you could not stand her being with you? Broken lives leaves broken children..hope all is better for you now. Valentine

[ladymaybebaby]

An honest piece, full of some tough memories and decisions! It been a while since I've read your work, so I'm glad to have found this one! Very nicely done as always... Thanks for sharing this piece with us!

-LMB
xoxo

[TheManInTheSuit]

Aww thanks everyone! Your comments are much appreciated. Hahahaha and thanks Valentine, but I didn't write this from personal experience (and yes its supposed to mean she had the same eyes as the mother). But the piece is more about how our past experiences, or always thinking we are a victim, or even holding on to one direction of thought; can make us blind to what is important now and unable to recognize that those things now will help shape our future.

[Ladywildalice]

What is the saying? "We must let go of the life we lead to lead the life we are meant to have?" We all make mistakes, often terrible mistakes. And often, I think, we tell ourselves it is too late. It is NEVER too late, until you are dead. This is a terribly tragic write, so well played out, it makes your reader cringe. Talent, pure and simple. Congrats on the spotlight, very well deserving.

[Jovel320]

Enjoyed your work though it is on the sad side of life. The lines on how mud tattoos everything was great and the main image was that of the mother's eyes. They reveal his lack of strength and purpose. Well done!!!
Jovel

[tangerinepie]

I really liked the honesty of this poem.The first stanza is very well crafted to set the mood.Personally, I feel there are way too many situations like this.Still, adversity is a fact of life, and we have to always look ahead to create a better future.Well done spotlight poem..Tangie..

[Rosella]

I reread to understand, ink wrote many to overwhelm by saying and write, through time it's written in life. Congrats on spotlight.

[Josie]

You wrote this as though you actually experienced the loss. Whether it was the child's life or the Father's life, both were tragic. Congratulations on the TPS spotlight.