In A Forest Green And Bright

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In A Forest Green And Bright

Post by AoR » July 4th, 2016, 6:41 pm

In A Forest Green And Bright

Rustle of grounded leaves
Ears perk to the tune of new footsteps.
Puffs of breath, heightened tension,
Forest dwellers stir from somber rest.
Amethyst eyes search about the green,
A smile soft creeps along a pale face.
Chatter amongst the birds and squirrels,
A stranger has come to their secret place!

In a forest, green and bright
Humming a song, a bounce in each step-
She absorbs the sounds of nature's life.
The tip tap of skittish residents ahead.
"There is no need to run away,
Though I imagine many a times you've heard that said.
I come from a far off place, but I am no stranger."
A smile brightens her eyes wild with mischief.
"I have spent a great deal with cousins of yours,
Are there any faeries near, have you any songs?
Would you care to listen, as I have learned a ton."

She chuckles to herself and wanders along,
Ignoring the whispers of bushytailed admirers.
"What a lovely little home you all share-
I hope you'll welcome me into it.
I come from a place both dark and dreary,
Vines coil paths, cold chills the air
And through a thick smog red eyes glare.
But...
There are hidden treats in darkness, you know.
I've seen the most lovely things beyond
Elder trees and very shy fog.
And eyes growing red - a handy little trick
When playing hide and seek within it.

But this I am quite new to, yes.
I've never seen a place so green and so young,
Your beauty dances in the rays of sun
Flittering through leaves of trees having fun.
The very air tickles, invites me to stay...
I wonder if any secrets remain
When the beauty is so open and ready to play.
I look forward to - Oh is that a soft hum?
Do my clever ears, hear the beats of small wings?
Little faeries, little faeries, where are you hiding?
I only have a few minutes before Father comes calling-
Not an ounce of adventure in his old bones, I tell you.
Back home he always sent guards to ruin my run.
But let us play, little dearies, let us carry on,
A secret forest game between beams of warm sun."
She snickers through a promise and chases fond.

In a forest green and bright, full of youthful sigh
New adventures are sure to come alive!


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Re: In A Forest Green And Bright

Post by Alan » August 19th, 2016, 3:11 am

Really detailed visuals. Almost like a Nature poem but it's fantastical and magical. A picture in words.



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Post by Chelle » October 8th, 2016, 1:04 pm

Indeed it's a bit of nature and a bit of a children's poem too. I love the sense of adventure and the secret aspect to it. You can almost see the interloper's smile.


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Post by QuietAstronomer » October 24th, 2016, 9:26 am

"Do my clever ears, hear the beats of small wings?".
Summarily concise in its representation.


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Re: In A Forest Green And Bright

Post by Jeff Goldman » January 8th, 2017, 11:05 am

Sweet rejuvenation with a walk through the woods ..... thanks for the trip



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Re: In A Forest Green And Bright

Post by AoR » January 11th, 2017, 6:54 pm

Ah how sweet to receive a Spotlight! I am thankful to those who so kindly read this piece of mine and appreciate the lovely feelings and thoughts shared over it. Thanks everyone! :D


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Re: In A Forest Green And Bright

Post by Josie » January 11th, 2017, 8:08 pm

You've created an imaginative world of wonder where magic becomes believable. I like the way you develop contrasts:
I come from a place both dark and dreary,
Vines coil paths, cold chills the air
And through a thick smog red eyes glare.
( a new world discovered)
I've never seen a place so green and so young,
Your beauty dances in the rays of sun
Flittering through leaves of trees having fun.
The very air tickles, invites me to stay...
(and more)
Amethyst eyes search about the green,
A smile soft creeps along a pale face.
Chatter amongst the birds and squirrels,
A stranger has come to their secret place!

This is so much fun! Congratulations.


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Re: In A Forest Green And Bright

Post by jsol » January 13th, 2017, 12:25 pm

very nice poem AoR... really very nice. i loved your voice in it and i loved the innocence of the experience, very childlike and full of wonder.

and josie... haha.. congratz of your 555th post!

much love



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Re: In A Forest Green And Bright

Post by Valentine » January 27th, 2017, 2:12 pm

Lovely write. Some of the most beautiful pictures were formed by God in nature. I love them all. Valentine



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