I clicked through them, wondering if there’s one
Willing to say, “Hi,” or spend some time, at least staying a while.
5:30 a.m., the sun approaches, but the night feels at its darkest now;
The rumble fumbles and tumbles: My pride a mistreated animal.
To realize it’s all gone: The world made of us nothing, destroying what’s left around.
I just saw your beauty, I just saw it truly, being paid to take and fall down;
That used to be you, that could’ve been us, if it weren’t for what rules us all.
I’m so close to death; I feel the heft, yet the hatred wants to hug.
I wish I could say sorry for all I’ve done, and your Armageddon, alone,
But time has us trapped; I can’t go back. Can’t even imagine this solved,
For now I see what we are: Hunters and Guineas—nothing more.
Hunters and Guineas
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Re: Hunters and Guineas
The flow and voice of this spoke volumes to me. The style was different but worked well for me. I look forward to,reading more of your work.
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Re: Hunters and Guineas
This is interesting.. the beginning makes me think of online dating, which makes me think that this poem is about a recent breakup... or a reflection on a previous relationship. I am also interested to know what the 'Hunters and Guineas' represents. I liked this poem. It's well written in and engaging. Thanks for sharing it!
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Re: Hunters and Guineas
I think the hunters + guineas is alcohol ?
maybe indicative of a relationship that will never be more than companionship...
nicely written by the way
maybe indicative of a relationship that will never be more than companionship...
nicely written by the way
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