Auschwitz

[cariusal]

Auschwitz



Old man why do you live in yesterday
Raking the leaves of long dead winters
Picking over the strands of recollection
Travelling the road of used to be
Two, six, four, one, nine, three
~
Scavenger in the fields of memory
A nomad on the plains of time
Through fading eyes you strive to see
Those rusting rails to eternity
Two, six, four, one, nine, three
~
Bury the bones, interne the past
Let me take your hand
Just two short steps to tomorrow
This is no place for you and me
Two, six, four, one, nine, three

[ladylilith]

A harrowing write. You captured all the emotion and implication without implicitly stating the obcious, the title sets the reader up with all the knowledge they need to know. The use of the number was clever, the repetition hammering home that idea that the atrocity can never be truly recovered from or forgot.

Impressive work! I always look forward to reading your writing though.

Lily^^

[Chelle]

Cari...reading this was hard for me. I remembered all the stories I heard told by the old ones at the synagogue and I couldn't help but close my eyes. I'll never know personally what it was like but I can see how easy it would be to get trapped into it for the rest of your life, unable to move on from the trauma. I love the way you depicted that dilemma.

Thanks.

[Toni Remington]

The image my mind conjured was so sad. I imagined this old man--a survivor of Auschwitz--now in a new place a new home. War is years in the past, but he's so depressed. Can't let it go. It's like he's still living there, even though he's free. He's still a prisoner in his own mind. It gave me a PTSD perspective of the victims. This was well done. Clappy Clappy for you.

[ladymaybebaby]

This was a difficult read for me. Only my great grandfather made it out of Poland in time. I have seen the list of relatives lost in the death camps. Not a one survived. The use of the number stamp was especially hard hitting. The repetion of it was powerful. The victims and survivors I think became haunted by being reduced to just a number. You handled a difficult topic brilliantly. Just the right approach. As hard as it was to read, I must say you did the topic justice in a hauntingly sad and powerful way. Thank you. -LMB xoxo

[rupertpupkin]

Brilliant write. Loved the repitive last line. Great poem by a member that is sorely missed. Well done on the spotlight.