Unreachable, stretching all imaginations
as memories and the past gets dragged along
teasing and taunting,
full of "what if" and "only so long"
A path curved of pebbles and dust,
carving through mountain of stone
a horizon never quite reached
and thoughts all my own
Heaven casts a shadowed hue
under the light of stars
staring into nothingness
and forever within a single gaze
From hilltop to valley floor,
traveller wanders onward
trips and stumbles
skin reveals flesh on bone
looking upward, begging skyward
Chasing dreams and inspiration
amongst shadows and light
a question upon lips,
pursued by his quest of tomorrow
Forever Tomorrow
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Jahaliel
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Re: Forever Tomorrow
This is amazing, I love it so much especially stanzas 2 and 3. Amazing OM ravendown xx
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I loved you then, I love you still though we are shadows of our former glory
Though they try to kill us off, we are a never-ending story
I loved you then, I love you still though we are shadows of our former glory
Though they try to kill us off, we are a never-ending story
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Re: Forever Tomorrow
You take the reader on a journey with you, your words make it so easy to really feel it and fall into the picture. Strong, emotive imagery that holds firmly throughout the piece. A superb piece of OM.. I felt quite akin to some of this, the questioning traveller of life, constantly persued by the past.
Ace work!
Lily^^
Ace work!
Lily^^
"The night is dark and full of terrors."
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sergoc
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Re: Forever Tomorrow
Hi, Raven!
Your nick supposed "wise".
And you with your piece state it!
Very good piece! Deep and clever!
Enjoyed!
Sergoc.
Your nick supposed "wise".
And you with your piece state it!
Very good piece! Deep and clever!
Enjoyed!
Sergoc.
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Re: Forever Tomorrow
Creatively composed, with lovely use of language and descriptive imagery, beautifully expressed and much enjoyed.
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Re: Forever Tomorrow
I enjoyed the poem...a journey of the soul...never arriving...we want serenity, so priceless. Thank you for sharing
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Re: Forever Tomorrow
"staring into nothingness
and forever within a single gaze-" what a beautiful line! and a beautiful idea too. It reflects the insecurity and the triumphs and everything in between that we all deal with on this journey so well. For me, this is also a reminder to live in the moment too. Maybe we spent too much time "chasing inspiration".... just a thought. Hats off to Ravendown. Wonderful descriptions too, well done
and forever within a single gaze-" what a beautiful line! and a beautiful idea too. It reflects the insecurity and the triumphs and everything in between that we all deal with on this journey so well. For me, this is also a reminder to live in the moment too. Maybe we spent too much time "chasing inspiration".... just a thought. Hats off to Ravendown. Wonderful descriptions too, well done
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Re: Forever Tomorrow
Ok wow - I loved this! I love how it starts out with “what if” and “only so long” and then the ending pursuing the quest of tomorrow was such a great way to wrap it up and also remind me that fate is also of my making…. Really well done and thank you for sharing!
~ Tobetta ~