The Blind man

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Brook
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The Blind man

Post by Brook » February 4th, 2013, 4:52 pm

We will hear, said the deaf man
We’ll sense what can’t be seen
We will heed the healer’s omen
We’ll strive to live life’s dream
We will bear the heaviest cross
We’ll swallow the bitterest pill
We will suffer the pain of loss
We’ll pray for strength of will
We will watch the play unfold
We’ll pine for the seer’s sight
We will see things not foretold
We’ll share our common plight
We will see God’s glorious plan
We’ll see, said the blind man

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Re: The Blind man

Post by QuietAstronomer » February 6th, 2013, 9:48 am

First off - Welcome to TPS.
The piece is very well contrived.
The flow through the characters by way of the dialogue is a very advanced form and displays a great deal of forethought and development.
The subject matter tied together nicely throughout.


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Re: The Blind man

Post by moe » February 6th, 2013, 11:35 am

This is kinda like a parabel of what those that have lost one sense (or were born without it) experence through their other senses. A well written and profound piece. A concrete piece which I can understand and empathise with.



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Re: The Blind man

Post by Alan » August 19th, 2017, 7:11 pm

Really neat repetition - such a good rhetorical device for this a poem all about being able to do something.

Seems like an old nursery rhyme or fable.



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Re: The Blind man

Post by Zombie » January 16th, 2018, 9:37 pm

It really does seem like an old fable as Alan said. I really love the beginning and the ending, how the repetition allows for such a smooth transition in all the lines. A really nice write.


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Re: The Blind man

Post by Josie » January 20th, 2018, 2:46 pm

I liked the repetition of 'we will' on one line and 'we'll' on the next. The dialogue from the deaf man to the blind man moved at a comfortable pace with the idea on each line connecting well with the next line introduced.


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