Lover In Media Res (Mature)

[sleepingsun1]

What would I have done?
Bashful, boastful and bracingly sure
I would draw you in, in media res
To my vicious vortex of convictions, stalwart
As rocks eroded by sea.

But you were
Mountainous morality where the sea
Cannot climb up. ‘I have true convictions’
You would have whispered, while being thirty two
And I eighteen, ‘By Christ, I am
A knockout universalisation, a fountain filled form.
The droplets of me flow into this Platonic tonic, purified
By truth.’

If we had been, I would have pulled you by the collar
Shook, shaken and
Slept beside you, then briefly, beatifically triumphant
Climbed Everest, seen the perception that
Cannot be perceived, and become it.

Would your fright filled sleepless nightmares
Have become the truth if you woke up to find
Sun in your eyes, the covers torn apart, a window
Smashed to let it through? The glass darkly
Burst through by me, and in my youth, would I have
Ran with all my convictions left in the quilt
Through the window, and out
Without you?

[ladymaybebaby]

There are so many layers to this piece, and it was a joy to peel each one back! Bonus points for using 'media res' I have not seen that used in a very long time! That is where all of the layers come in... in between the start and the close. Your diction is grand, the phrasing is beautiful and in the end, it left this reader thinking... I love a great write that has that effect on the reader, holding just a little back and letting each person that reads this see things in their own way! Really nice work! Thank you for sharing it with us!

-LMB
xoxo

[ladylilith]

Love this. I knew I would. I knew, from the title, that this was going to be a poem that grabbed me and pulled me in. Putting the reader, and the speaker, right into the action, and staying there. It's really wonderful working, pure poetry in motion for sure. LOVE it. Thank you for sharing it.

Lily^^

[Baywriter]

I read this earlier and had to come back to leave a coment when I finally had time. I really enjoyed this piece. It's very well-paced and peppered with all kinds of interesting internal rhymes and alliteration. This is a piece of sound, I think, and that's the main reason why I appreciate it. It just flies so well off the tongue. It's something that you can read again and again, each time with equal enjoyment. Thanks for sharing it with us.

Bay

[Ladywildalice]

Beautifully accomplished. Grand in scope and imagery, lovely to read and so enjoyable. Thanks and congratulations on the spotlight. Very well deserved.