A Thousand Spotlights.

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A Thousand Spotlights.

Post by MusicMyLife » March 15th, 2013, 2:07 pm

Suppress the urges,
Cut the throat of your demon,
And come with me,
Look at the stars,
They will guide us,
Like a compass.

I'm open to your views,
I'll even give you a pint of my blood,
To spill from a cup of faith,
We're in grave danger,
So let's run with a thousand spotlights,
Nesting on us.

You've got a smile,
That could light a theatre,
Of dreams,
I wish my smile was as contagious.

We make it to the end of the road,
A sparkle comes from the frost,
We clench our fists,
They're in the distance,
Like blots on a piece of paper,
We now know we've got a fight,
On our hands.

I look at you,
We have time to contemplate,
I kiss you on the cheek,
Its time to waltz through,
The destruction.



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Post by ladylilith » March 15th, 2013, 4:25 pm

This is beautiful! In a very grounding and exciting kind of way. I think it's the danger element you added, and how this easily transfers into a more real or experienced situation while staying a great narrative in its own right. The reader can take from it what they want. I thought it was a beautiful love story at a very basic level and something much deeper when you dig a little. Love it!

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Post by ladymaybebaby » March 15th, 2013, 6:17 pm

I always enjoy reading your work and it's been a while! Glad to see you back! I like the unity in this piece, the let's fight together and be rewared together. Their is no conflict in the unity between the two people, it's only in what lays ahead. I think you've really managed to provide concrete images while mainting your trademark style! Very nice work as always. A pleasure to read you again!

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Post by SirDaniel » March 16th, 2013, 5:29 am

I love the way your poem plays on light in so many places, showing that the one we feel closest to is our light. Beautiful imagery, much enjoyed.

Daniel



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Post by Sasha » May 12th, 2013, 3:43 am

A Thousand Spotlights under the Spotlight, suh-weet!!

I so like the language you employed here, and I love how it was played on both, fantasy/reality sides. I also like the tender tone the speaker is addressing their beloved with, and it's assuring one, though, some bumps are waiting ahead for them, but together, they'll make it.
Wonderfully written, and I so enjoyed reading it. Congratulations on the 'Thousand Spotlights'!

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Post by ladymaybebaby » May 12th, 2013, 8:40 am

Congratulations on the spotlight pick of the week, I enjoyed this one from the start! A much deserved honor!

-LMB
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Post by Baywriter » May 15th, 2013, 2:37 pm

Like Sasha, I enjoyed the fact that this was spotlighted and had "spotlights" in the title and within the poem. What luck! I thought this was really well-written. The images were captivating, and the language was lyrical and captivating. Congrats on the spotlight. Well-deserved!

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Post by inflames » May 16th, 2013, 4:28 am

The final image is brilliant. Lovely work with this! Congrats on your spotlight!



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Post by Larsen M. Callirhoe » May 16th, 2013, 5:47 am

brilliant. i love the nature that goes from dangerous to genuine love. enjoyed.

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Post by dornicks » May 17th, 2013, 5:08 pm

Written with a lot of thought and feeling and soothing in it's own way. Congratulations on being in the Spotlight,

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Post by everhopeful » May 18th, 2013, 3:13 pm

There's quite a lot of violent images and references in this one, particularly in the outset, which is unusual for a poem with romance at its heart, however that confrontational approach captured my attention and made the more gentle content which followed fall into place well. It's a very boldly stated poem and while it isn't without nuance, the grand nature of it is memorable.
Congratulations on the spotlight.



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Post by jwesley » May 19th, 2013, 11:39 am

I just hate it when I read a piece, supposedly again, that I know I already commented on, and find my name has vanished, lol.

I saw love in a battle for life, in this piece; two people leaving but wanting to stay, looking eye-to-eye like
a Rorschach test . . .blots on a piece of paper, We now know we've got a fight, On our hands. .

The willingness to still . . . try, though it may be all that lingers.

good piece, my friend.

j.



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