conversance
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soft-spoken winds,
we're alone -
tell your story
we're alone -
tell your story
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Re: conversance
Ooh, lovely imagery! The environment influences our moods and actions much more than we give it credit for. Really great write.
Be the strange you wish to see in the world
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Re: conversance
Jim,
are you published? if you are not, major haiku journals are
lacking some of the best quality writing.
superb, Jim. yeah, its that good.
always with respect,
cesario
are you published? if you are not, major haiku journals are
lacking some of the best quality writing.
superb, Jim. yeah, its that good.
always with respect,
cesario
bamboo flower
once in one hundred years
you
cesario
frogpond vol.35:3
once in one hundred years
you
cesario
frogpond vol.35:3
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Re: conversance
Some stories remain untold because here is no receptive ear. I think the notion of inscribing the ear is wonderful.
If at first you don't succeed, try second, third, or shortstop.
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Re: conversance
Love that last line. And the first...and second. You catch my drift, this was a beautifully written haiku.
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Re: conversance
another one that got me right there! In this case, I felt it in the place at the top of my chest where one begins to sing.
Amazing. *Someone* should publish you!
Amazing. *Someone* should publish you!
Throughout the whole absurd life I'd lived, a dark wind had been rising toward me from somewhere deep in my future, across years that were still to come, and as it passed, this wind levelled whatever was offered to me at the time”
― Albert Camus, The Stranger
― Albert Camus, The Stranger
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Re: conversance
wonderful jim, a strong and softly spoken secret
"I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing than to teach ten thousand stars how not to dance" e.e. cummings
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Re: conversance
Dearest Jim, what a beautiful Haiku and a brilliant metaphor. Sometimes we just need a kind person like
you to listen. But for some that is hard to find. A truly great write my friend.
Much Love And Respect,
ladylynnmary
you to listen. But for some that is hard to find. A truly great write my friend.
Much Love And Respect,
ladylynnmary
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Re: conversance
A most intimate feeling conjured here, Jim, so well befitting the subject and feeling created of anthropomorphic love and connection...
One Haiku=Haiku. Two Haiku=haiku. Not haikus or haiku's. Thank you.
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Re: conversance
Wow! I'm sorry I missed this one on the boards! Thank goodness for second chances! You have a new fan here... A great haiku!!! Congratulations on the spotlight pick of the week, it is much deserved! And I've found a new fave writer on top of all of the other great things here! It's like you win for your work, but I win as well because I get to read your work. Best part about TPS is all of the great poetry at our hands... amazing!
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xoxo
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xoxo
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Re: conversance
This is a poem which begs for a reply, I mean that not only in terms of a response on a poetry site but in terms of being the expression you long to hear when the words are stuck inside and you know they must be said. "soft-spoken winds" is such a fine metaphor, it makes me ponder if the speaker knows some of what they are asking to hear won't be pleasant, yet still does so nonetheless.
Congratulations on the spotlight!
Congratulations on the spotlight!
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Re: conversance
How a Haiku can pack such a powerful punch! Oh my and what the wind's would have to say, one can only imagine...Simple and Elegant...CONGRATULATIONS on the spotlight! Musie
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Re: conversance
I'll have to be honest,Jim and say that I know very little about Haiku. However ,I'm happy to join the ranks of those who do and have praised your work. Congratulations to you,
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Re: conversance
Indeed, a piece that speaks volumes!
This is such a clever choice of words presenting a great thought with great imagery. Super work!
Congratulations on the Spotlight!
Sash
This is such a clever choice of words presenting a great thought with great imagery. Super work!
Congratulations on the Spotlight!
Sash
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Re: conversance
Wow, this was just incredible, JIm. So much said with so few words - just a perfect Haiku and so very deserving of the spotlight - well done!
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Re: conversance
Congratulations
Your word deserves the spotlight.
Your word deserves the spotlight.
If at first you don't succeed, try second, third, or shortstop.