Tonight

[QuietAstronomer]

Am I out of my mind?
Eyes looking up into yours.
Dead eyes stare back.
What did we find?
Through lonesome hours.
Finding what we lack.
Dead beneath this grind.
Holding you close.
Your bone against my flesh.
Waking up so cold.
Sockets stare at me in love.
Trapped in this death pose.
Forming a bony mesh.
Waiting for my flesh to unfold.
Cold blood drips from above.
It simply took one dose.

So tonight girl, it's only you and me.


(C) 2013 Quiet Astronomer

[dwells]

For goodness sakes, take her out for a pizza! Pondering some deeper elements now and too sad to say much more than sorry, oh and cheers QA! Heavy duty.
Later - A well deserved spotlight and I think Flux just about nailed it after several re-reads - when lust has had its day and love has flown away. Once more for auld ang syne maybe, but then we don't always get a do-over, sadly - or maybe if we do it only confirms that it is indeed, over.

[songofmeadow]

This is incredibly, if gruesomely, good qa, metaphors abound and I do like your end stops, some serious finality going on there, mx

[trace]

Reminds me of Cold Ethyl by Alice Cooper.

[Mr Goth]

I am taking this as a drug addiction or a real bad sexual addiction either way I love the despair you brought forth

[flux]

There is nothing more horrific than real life and this strikes me as being a true life experience, maybe not your own, I don't like to think it is, but I imagine it being the experience of someone in a meaningless and emotionally empty relationship.

[QuietAstronomer]

Alors, mon amie. it is mine.

[Darkvassal]

Necrophilic, Mortal Kombat-ish images,slick images fill my head. I can see it, almost as if its happening to me.
Exalt!

[Rosella]

This is baffling, that it describe dark days or can be interpreted for awkwardness between couple, I've seen and heard one, this poem get me understand more day as it speak volume of unspeakable woes. What I mean baffling that is this scene can imply of any serious circumstances and issues or simple problems, this poem describe bad day arises.

[Dew]

The imagery, though complex, creates a great icon for the destructive force of desire...congrats on the spot mate! - dew

[songofmeadow]

So pleased to have your poem revived (!) for a re-read, worth many reads more mx

[dornicks]

Deserving of it's place in the Spotlight. Congratulations,

dornicks

[mangodog]

perhaps, QA, it's related to your tag line:

Love is just another drug that doesn't change anything.

Of course this is the truth in that kind of love. I shivered when
I read this, so you got to me!

Congrats.....Drew

[Sasha]

This is chilling in a striking, brilliant way; I love this smash between life and death, this wonderful contrast, and I don't know, but there's something about this that pulls you in in an involuntary way, that you enjoy this so much and at the same it gives you the shivers. The way you separate the last line doubled the effect, and the reader wouldn't know what they are heading for at the end.
Love this- Congratulations on the Spotlight, QA!

Sash

[bumblebee]

two candles without flames clinging to each-other and hoping to find life within each-others arms.. either that or i'm projecting a memory of my own.. eerily familiar..

amazing write :)