Worth Living

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Worth Living

Post by rootbeer » November 19th, 2013, 7:37 am

My eyes glaze at the beauty of the stars
Glittering on the lake
And the thistle wisp of grass on the bottom of my toes
Hold in your eyes this glory
To be small in this universal glow
A flutter of the lash
And softness of breath
The touch of happiness
And a longing for it to last
Time is always a vessel
A moment that we remember
A place that said beautiful
And a life moving and loving
A resume of why life is worth living


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Re: Worth Living

Post by everhopeful » November 19th, 2013, 1:22 pm

Some really nice, subtle touches in this one, in among the more obvious grand imagery and references. I was particularly fond of the expression 'thistle wisp', it sounds as soft as what it describes, and the contrast between the little blade of grass beneath the speaker, to the source of light above them, gives this a very centred feel. Even though the thought of feeling small compared to the universe can be intimidating, this actually feels like an utterly serene piece, content and connected to the world.
Really enjoyed the read!



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Re: Worth Living

Post by bekah22 » November 19th, 2013, 10:29 pm

Agreed.. the subtlety really brought this one for me. Sweet, sincere, and joyful-sounding. Lovely!


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Re: Worth Living

Post by Nakedpoet » November 20th, 2013, 12:02 am

Time is always a vessel, like the line and the poem my friend.


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Post by rootbeer » November 20th, 2013, 1:05 am

Thank you all so much. We had a Open Mic tonight. A friend said they were not going to be reading anything yesterday, so i wrote them this to read at tonight OM.

Thank you for your very kind words.


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Re: Worth Living

Post by Dew » January 5th, 2014, 7:03 pm

Adored the sentiment...want so much to embrace it! Your gentle invitation makes it so tempting...congrats on the spot M-Lo! - dew



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Re: Worth Living

Post by dwells » January 5th, 2014, 8:25 pm

The little things we remember and that perhaps remind us what we are; softly stated and memorable in the understatement, cheers RB and two snaps up high!


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Re: Worth Living

Post by Ladywildalice » January 5th, 2014, 8:31 pm

Congratulations on the spotlight RB. This is a charming write that shouts with a truth that more need to hear. If everyone would just stop in their frantic dash to go place, see people, buy, buy, buy, have, have, have, get, get, get, and climb that ladder........if instead they would take a walk outside, smell a flower, look closely at the lovely green trees, watch the waves on the lakes and ocean, listen to the birds, watch the butterflies, smell the rain, feel mud between their toes, see the stars, see the rainbows...their soul would find a calm it has been in need of for so long. Excellent write and much appreciated. Congrat again.


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Re: Worth Living

Post by rupertpupkin » January 6th, 2014, 11:51 am

Wonderful gentle and subtle touch here, great write and well done on the most deserving spotlight.


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Re: Worth Living

Post by candlewitch » January 6th, 2014, 12:44 pm

hello Rootbeer,

I much enjoyed these lines:

Hold in your eyes this glory
To be small in this universal glow

congratulations!
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Re: Worth Living

Post by everhopeful » January 6th, 2014, 1:23 pm

Another spotlight poem this week which manages to make a lot out of relatively few words. Some solid images help to make this one even greater than the sum of its parts, and while the phrasing of 'thistle wisp' still captures my imagination, I think the tone and sentiment as a whole keeps it until the end.
Congratulations on the spotlight.



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Re: Worth Living

Post by inflames » January 6th, 2014, 9:47 pm

Beautiful ending here. Congrats on your spotlight! Well deserved.


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Re: Worth Living

Post by DanInGala » January 7th, 2014, 4:29 pm

Hi Root. I loved this. I can really identify with it too. When I have a problem nowdays, I tend to go out for a walk, usually at night (the dog LOVES it) and take in the stars and sky, the clearer the better. It tends to make my 'problem' virtually disappear, as if being under the wonder is really all that matters. The imagery you created in this piece captures that perfectly, and this wonderful poem deserves its Spotlight, congrats.

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Re: Worth Living

Post by nightseas » January 7th, 2014, 7:39 pm

A spotlight that I can agree with, finally! I enjoyed the flow of it and the content, overall. It makes for a very relaxing experience. The way you extend the scene into thoughts of its significance among the spectrum of time is fantastic, as well. Great work!



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Re: Worth Living

Post by Mr D » January 8th, 2014, 5:03 am

well deserved lights Rooty !
the lingering tone to this was really awesome, like a flavor itching vividly



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Post by PoeTAndrEw » January 9th, 2014, 2:13 pm

A poetic sentiment about the appreciation of the world and how we seek for it to last and why it's worth living.Poetry defined



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Re: Worth Living

Post by rootbeer » January 10th, 2014, 11:47 am

Wow, I was just checking my messages, and come back to this. Thank you all for the great sentiments.


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Re: Worth Living

Post by nortan223 » January 11th, 2014, 5:30 pm

In this world of "glitzy" extravagence, the simple natural things that you bring out in your gentle poem are so often overlooked., even destroyed. This was a refreshing "wake up" call to appreciate the less artificial features that make life really worthwhile.
This could also be self-gratification in the nicest sense of the word, deserving your Spotlight accolade.

Norman


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Re: Worth Living

Post by Josie » January 12th, 2014, 12:10 am

Congrats on the spotlight! Those moments in time when we just soak in the beauty that surrounds us can go along way in easing stress and calming the spirit. I liked the tone and your narrator's voice of appreciation for the beauty surrounding him.


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Re: Worth Living

Post by rootbeer » January 12th, 2014, 2:39 am

That is so nice of you to say Norton and Josie.


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