Trinkets

[Gerson]

Looking at the cabinet,
Some antiquated chinese theme-
The gravity of trinkets, their stillness winks, suggests
That there's enough time in a life,
Enough room, to play more than one role.
To master complication, fold it away
Whilst you go study architecture;
Dust a site for bones.
Maybe scour the ocean, document the tides?
Some tribal looking statue
On the mantle stirs the mind.
I walk the same roads, tread the same rugs
That saw me walk my debut-
Scenes i re-enact on drugs.
But what wilderness is left, it's nothing when compared
To the places you can visit
Without going anywhere.

[Baywriter]

I'm sure it's been said already, but welcome to TPS!
I really like this piece. To me, the sadness here comes from not having enough time to truly experience the world, though it seems as if we have more time than we actually do. I was unsure about the tone at the end of the piece because it seemed a little more uplifting, like there's more to experience than just the physical world. There's also another place in our own minds and imaginations. It's as if the speaker sort of got lost in that place, though, perhaps has wasted too much time using drugs, and in that case, the message at the end seems much more somber.
Still, the language here is excellent. I love the way you manifested the images of the "trinkets" and emphasized their "gravity" to unravel the message of the poem. Great work!

Bay

[UlfvarrOT]

good work, I like this one. It's really direct yet grabs your attention and makes you think about how much history can be seen by a simple trinket, or by exploring the world.

[Gerson]

thanks guys. apologies if it is not appropriate for this board, i think i am inspired by a ubiquitous sadness that often leads me to unforeseen conclusions. i really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment x

[candlewitch]

hello,

"Looking at the cabinet,
Some antiquated chinese theme-
The gravity of trinkets, their stillness winks, suggests
That there's enough time in a life,
Enough room, to play more than one role."

this poem reaches out and grabs the reader, pulling them into the speaker's world! I much enjoyed those lines which I quoted!

always, Cat

[JASON]

this screams of expectations that have not been met,
an overwhelming sense of failure...
congratulations on the spotlight.

[oursummertrees]

I'm with Bay mostly in the feelings this evoked in me while reading - but really from the very start, I was pretty captivated by this. Great write, and congrats on the spotlight!

[rupertpupkin]

Wonderfully sad read for me. Well done on the much deserved spotlight.Sean.

[everhopeful]

I really enjoyed this one, especially as a poem to evoke sadness in the reader, because it's not overt, smack you in the face sadness. A lot of life's pains aren't like that, and like this poem seem to come from seemingly innocent moments where you weigh up your life, sometimes in direct comparison to others, where you feel like you're stood still while they are always moving.
Really love that ending, to me it speaks of the power of the imagination, especially when you use it to taunt yourself.
Welcome to TPS and congratulations on the spotlight.

[Gerson]

Much gratitude to all the writers for their feedback, and to the TPS crew for the honour of the spotlight. It's enough to keep one at it. x

[starscollide]

Enjoyed reading this too but although it feels a little sombre I think of it as being able to experience pieces of things that you have not had time to do through these trinkets. An object can hold so much sentiment and dreams that you may not actually have to have done this or that to imagine what it could be.

[Hillbillyhippie]

Made me think of the movie "Indian in the cupboard", not to say that's what your poem is. It just makes me think of one venturing into the unknown, the cupboard, and into magical places, where you can visit faraway places. That's what has always intrigued me about the written word. The wonderful stories that can be told with them. Great job, and congrats.

[songofmeadow]

Congrats and a late welcome :) The last two lines struck home and were the icing on the cake here, probably made more effective by the detached/downbeat narrative preceding, much enjoyed thanks mx

[Baywriter]

I loved this poem before, and I still love it now. Congrats on the spotlight! Well-deserved for sure!

Bay

[Dew]

I love cabinets full of trinkets...I like to think of walmart as a cabinet for interesting people. heh...congrats on the spotlight! well deserved! - dew

[dwells]

Trinkets, souveniers, keepsakes all reminders of another place or time. Some real and some only imagined yet the mind can merge, the memory fade, as we escape - if but for a while. Marvelous and insightful Gerson and welcome again. You've touched with grace on something insightful and don't ever lose that magic, cheers!