unborn

[rayofsun214]

In that bed where you were born,
_______I hardly knew you.
I cradled your head in the crook of my arm and
_______Whispered the secrets of life into your ear.
__________Small conchae like a highway to your wavering spirit.
Is it birth if you never breathed that small room’s stifling air?
_______We wailed and moaned and a mother was left spent
__________And floating in her afterbirth; floating in your sea of unrequited cries;
_____________Silent and cooling, like you in your swaddling blankets.
On the beach where we let you go, you washed up your ear;
_______I whispered my secrets into that conch, whispers spiraling dextral.
__________I hardly knew you that day, save that soft whirl and fleshy lobe.

[The Ruiner]

Wow. This is painfully beautiful. It's an amazing piece.

[ladylilith]

Painfully tragic.. Im at a lost for words.. A real heart-wrenching write.. Just.. Wow. (I'm very rarely made speechless..)

Lily^^

[Jahaliel]

Such a pain, such a terrible terrible loss. There's such a vividness to your words that really reaches in and touches the readers heart. Thankyou for sharing this.

[flux]

This is real poetry, for sure. This has a heart and a soul, it is inspired by deep and true feeling which is skillfully expressed. Greatly admired this.

[Sasha]

Oh my!! Such an effective sorrowful piece yet brilliantly dilevered to tug the reader's heart in such a great way.
Great Work and Congrats on the deserved Spotlight!

Sasha

[Whiskurz]

Wow indeed......Great piece.....Congrats on the spotlight.....Whisk

[ladymaybebaby]

Beautiful use of metaphors in a most striking piece! Congrats on the spotlight. Another wonderful choice!
-LMB xoxo

[Dew]

A touching and painful account of something so common, but so impossibly difficult. So many questions after...finding peace in sorrow is a honor to memory. Every loss, however small, is infinity to us. Beautiful write...Dew

[Rosella]

I was stunned, but, this is incredible piece, haunting, sad, and beautifully written. Incredible!

[songofmeadow]

I read and marvelled at the poetic beauty that allows readers to share intimately this sad experience, humbled, meadow

[inflames]

Ray, I've always been a fan of your poetry. This is a lovely piece. Congrats on your spotlight.

[knpoet]

This was just so incredibly sad, you managed to convey such an acute sense of loss and of grief and of love in relatively few, well chosen words. This kind of intense poetry comes from deep within the heart, where the pain lives.
Congratulations on the spotlight, this certainly is deserving of the spot!
Kathy

[karrie]

This left me speechless! Congrats on the spotlight!

[SirDaniel]

such sadness.. a life that could have been but destiny has chosen to pass by.. your poem shows both love and pain. enjoyed the read and congratulations on the spotlight.

~ Daniel

[musie]

So tenderly written in that it just reaches in and rips the reader's heart out..the imagery in this ode to the lost little one is brilliant....A great piece from your pen...and a painful read, but Congrat's on the Spotlight...most deserved....Musie

[playerfrost]

very sad...., makes you think about the little things and moments in life.

[newlight]

heartbreaking...truly heartbreaking xxemma

[ladylilith]

I am SO glad this got spotlighted. It's such a wrenching read, I was affected all over again. Seriously superior work, very much deserving its time to shine!!

Lily^^

[rayofsun214]

I humbly thank all who read and commented on this piece, which is a piece of my heart and my history.

And I am truly honored and happy that it was chosen for the spotlight, thank you.

rae