great poem
show not tell.....you do it extremely well
David
Dark Venus.
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sparky21737
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Re: Dark Venus.
I really liked this poem. I loved the words and images and well everything. A beautiful poem and thanks so much for sharing
Sparky
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Happiness can be found even in the darkest of times, if one only remembers to turn on the light ~ Albus Dumbledore
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Re: Dark Venus.
Ermagerd! Sorry for not posting back so soon.
Makes me look ungrateful. Thanks to all three of you!
Makes me look ungrateful. Thanks to all three of you!
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SilentTears
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Re: Dark Venus.
This was extremely vivid and I loved the imagery. Very moving and loving.
Pretend I don't burn
I'm not burning here.
I just lay ash
On my eyelids,
And rub it deep into my
Bones.
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