Fate by Design

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Fate by Design

Post by Darkness » August 11th, 2014, 12:09 am

Fate by Design


The shadow grows, though deathly still,
In candlelight, weary of will.
On cavern walls, cold as a tomb,
Through mists of magic's sweet perfume.
An open book, an ageless lore…
Sightless eyes look beyond the fore
To glean clearly, from well wrought line
A glimpse of fate, if by design.

Wretched and frail, a shaking hand
Page by page avails Time's demand.
Hour by hour, withers away
As day turns night, as night turns day.
A soul long dead, searching for life;
A dream well fed, a loving wife
Eyes once beheld, a day long past…
Searching lifelong, for Time's recast.

A silver robe negligently
Would speak of forgone luxury.
Royal emblem about the breast,
A long forgotten regal crest.
The family scourge, the Prince of Pain,
Seeking a dream lost in the rain.
King next in line, honor pristine
Forwent to find who would be queen.

In dimming light sunken eyes tear.
Perhaps hope now gives way to fear.
Upon his neck the laughing breath
Of ‘er anticipating Death.
Closing the book, in mental sigh.
A pinched candle would glean goodbye.
Palm placed to book, a torn soul cries
O’er life mistook, closes his eyes.

*******

In pouring rain, walking alone,
A peasant's life, hers to atone;
A carriage close, she steps aside
As splash of mud does nil to pride.
But the horses stop, with a shout,
And there a stately man steps out.
Silver attire sets heart astir,
Why would this young Prince stop for her?


Michael Anderson


But dreams—of those who dream as I,
Aspiringly, are damned, and die: 
~Poe~

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Re: Fate by Design

Post by up2quark » August 11th, 2014, 5:08 pm

What a well constructed form of emotion.

A delicate framework, architecture, and over design led to a old esoteric feeling of enlightenment, like an ancient seer.

I can see the messages, the syntax developing through use of mental exercises of paradigms of life, in which, The King see's himself as an example to others, yet is embellished into the life of the Queen, this realization, helps maintain a balance that he himself is not married yet, but may or may be?

Good poem.



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Re: Fate by Design

Post by Chelle » August 13th, 2014, 4:14 pm

reminds me of so many fairy tales, but with a dark tinge. Indeed the old steps aside so the new one can step up. I love the fear and the knowledge that the end is coming though. Well written.


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Re: Fate by Design

Post by Darkness » August 16th, 2014, 9:46 pm

up2quark, May be, indeed.

Chelle, It's no so much the old stepping aside for the new, but the old succeeding in turning back time to when he was "the new," after years of questing for the knowledge to be able to do so. He saw that one specific moment in time to be the only chance he ever had at finding true love, but misled by other's beliefs, rode on right past it at the time... even though regret was almost instantaneous.

Some people live a regret filled life because they can never overcome their parents belief system to reach for a happiness of their own making, and/or liking.


But dreams—of those who dream as I,
Aspiringly, are damned, and die: 
~Poe~

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Re: Fate by Design

Post by allmirth » September 25th, 2014, 10:21 pm

Oh would that we could go back in time and alter our most regretted mistakes. The thought is painful, being an unattainable fantasy. You weave an enjoyable tale here.

Thanks much for sharing.


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