A pocketful of pennies

[JASON]

It's all you have left, isn't it?
small change...

The lofty aspirations lie scattered
dreams dispersed like dust.
Reality has dealt you a cruel blow
paying you in unkind currency
- A lifetime unwisely spent.

[Liddie]

Nothing worse to look back and realize you've watsted so much time on the wrong decisions. I love the intro lines

[Mike6]

This is really good, one of my favourites by you. It's got a real touch of sadness to it. Feels like you've wasted a lifetime doing what youve been doing. I love 'dreams dispersed like dust' great line there. I also like how you play w/ the idea of life and money. Ver yoriginal. Thanks for sharing. :)

[karrie]

I adore this! You say so much in few words.

[everhopeful]

I like the use of money as being synonymous with a different kind of currency here, one of life satisfaction; of course the two sometimes go hand in hand, and in this case it seems as though the speaker's musings are inspired by a lack of cash, yet it takes them into a much deeper self-analysis than simply reviewing a bank statement. Clever wordplay, but a devastating theme.

[dornicks]

This is so appropriate to a situation a friend of mine finds himself in,from hero to zero in a flash. Thank you for sharing this,

dornicks

[up2quark]

That is unwise to lose but always gain; yet some ways are only through pain.

[escorial]

short and full too.............liked

[songofmeadow]

Good metaphor Jason and easy for the reader to personalise elsewhere, I also like that the addressee is unnamed, that ambiguity is a strong part of the poem's appeal mx

[riversidepoet]

A beautiful poem that will cause one to ponder, thanks for sharing, may God bless

[ramfire]

A sad poem that seems to tell of disappointment. All our plans ruined because of life's unfairness. Such things happen and there's no rational explanation.

[Christopher11]

It is sad in my country, how invaluable a penny has become. I do not believe that our forefathers could have imagined the mega-monster it was striving to create. Mankind's attempts to uplift, by collecting treasure-troves of material things, makes me really question what the hell we're doing! When we truly accept Jesus Christ, our lifetime never ends. Wake up America! When we continue to trudge in the world that we see, we can become quite the shredded mess. Thank you for sharing! I apologize if I took your words into an unintended direction, but I really liked the message!
David

[iSurrender]

Powerful little poem that draws the reader in and captivating in its message with a strong ending.

[Dew]

I loved the mini-litany of comparisons you made with a handful of your last, scattered coins...and the faithful way you continued to explore metaphorical treatment of remnants and coinage...unkind currency, unwisely spent. You stuck so close to your idea but branched off in every pleasing direction all at once and in the space of a tight pocket of poetry. I really enjoyed this little bit. I remember what it was like to have every dream, every hope, every expectation for the future robbed and stand there stunned counting the couple-few things I may still rely on for joy. well written mate - dew

[maurice]

This small piece speaks volumes to me. Sometimes we can't see the trees through the forest. Sometimes we are so focused on the practical completion of our goals that we lose sight of what the completion of the goal is supposed to get us. What good is it to become successful if being successful doesn't make us happy? Isn't that the ultimate goal of any of our aspirations, to be happy?

I enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing.

[Wes Corona]

When poor choices are made, the results are often sorrowful. You nailed it Jason.

[Sunday]

Nice poem. Never fear, if lifetime unwisely spent, because who is really wise? And learning is never too late you know, and the earlier awakened are earlier wise.

[sparky21737]

I love that it was a short poem but it had so much in it. There is nothing worse then realising that you have spent so long trying only to realise you are on the wrong track or losing a dream and wasting time. Well written thanks for sharing

Sparky

[LorettaYoung]

A profound reality beautifully phrased. Unfortunately, thoughts and decision making are not taught in school, and apparently not in homes anymore; peer pressure for stupidity reigns, and, despite experience, we often do not make wise choices anyway. Thought provoking, and well well phrased. Best Loretta

[ramfire]

Kinda makes me sad to think a person has nothing to show for a lifetime of hard work but a pocketful of pennies. It seems so unfair. What's to be done?