The Thing That Came From The Moon.

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The Thing That Came From The Moon.

Post by Pride Ed » June 15th, 2015, 5:03 pm

(Any help editing this story would be awesome! Thanks in advance!)



I hate the moon — I am afraid of it — for when it shines on certain scenes familiar and loved it sometimes makes them unfamiliar and hideous.”
— H.P. Lovecraft, What The Moon Brings.



Even to this very day, I cannot allow myself in the presence of any white flower, should those memories of pale redolence and blood permeate my waking thoughts! I’ve been told that this phobia is highly irrational, considering the field of study I had registered myself in before such an occurrence presented itself to me. As a man of science, I still revel in the tainted skepticism of a logical, yet foolish mind, — for that chimerical vision had proved its existence without the aid of the human psyche. As I write this account after twenty years, do I dare ask what frightfully brilliant mind could create such a beautiful, yet abhorred creature that never ceases to haunt each night that I have the displeasure of welcoming after the departure of a deep claret sky every sunset? In the hopes of releasing myself from this grotesque beauty in the light of the full moon, I shall recall all that I experienced in those months that I conducted my studies.

Studying plant-life had long since taken hold of my attention, so I resolved to earn a degree in botany. Although I was still considered an amateur, I had my fair share of academic accomplishments; my manuscript on the characteristics of non-native plants had been the object of scholarly inquiry for months after a scientific journal had agreed to print my work. I sought more knowledge, —and more specimens as my expertise and credentials grew. Eventually, my endeavors lead me to a secluded part of land located in the French countryside. My colleagues had boasted that many rare specimens flourished in this part of the world, many undiscovered or scarcely examined. The cottage I stayed in was encompassed by many vibrant blooms on what seemed to be endless acres. Although my cottage was small, its anesthetically pleasing exterior (as well as interior) made it seem like a magical marvel amidst all of the blooms around it. I remember being in a state of sublime blithe, for I was to call this place home for six months. After settling in, I quickly began to conduct my studies. Being most zealous, began to document and sketch every type of flower I encountered. As I explored the area, I discovered a certain type of flower that had not yet bloomed, though the rest of flower was of considerable size. I fingered the vine- like stem as I inferred the state of the specimen. I concluded that the flower was mature in every other detail, — despite the absence of bloom. My fingers wandered to its milky-white petals which were compressed in a spiral cocoon-like shape. I bent to see if this flower had any type of scent and I was surprised to find a slight redolence that seemed to rival the scents of all the perfumes in Europe! As I darted the landscape for more plants reminiscent of these unusual features, I found smaller specimens belonging to the same species growing under the blooms of the more visible flowers.

It was hours before I decided to retire to my cottage. It was beginning to grow dark, and some of the locals in the town not too far away had advised me to be wary at night while in this area, as odd occurrences were common-place. I smirked at the alleged superstitions of the townsfolk, who were probably inclined to attribute the distant howls and shrieks of a coyote to a dreadful apparition that plagued the sprawling acres at night for a dreadfully generic justification. Despite my thoughts, I was still inclined to heed such warnings, as this vast area was still very foreign to me. It must have been hours later when I first noticed the spectacular, — now foreboding scene that began to unfold out of the expansive bay windows that lined one side of the cottage. While I lounged in a leather armchair drinking bourbon and reading over another colleague’s manuscript, I noticed an ethereal glow below the window outside. At first I thought it to be snowing, but it was late spring in this region. Curious, I rose from my seat. As I approached the window, I saw that the ground was completely covered in a glowing white. Running to the door, I began to detect the same exact smell of the mysterious plant I found earlier. Opening the door to the cottage brought with it the saturated redolence and the scenery of a dream-land. The flowers that I found earlier were in full bloom everywhere. The other species seemed to have vanished. Wandering off the porch and into the wave of white, I felt almost like my body was light, — fluid even! But I dismissed this strange feeling and attributed it to my favorite drink. As I looked around at the scene before me, my analytical prowess took hold. I resolved to go back into the cottage to retrieve a flowing pot and spade. With ease, I wandered about the strange flowers, looking for the perfect specimen. Finding the seemingly perfect plant, I carefully extracted it, as well as some soil, all while taking care to keep the roots intact. This plant was to sit on my table in the living courters. Over the next month, I noted curious changes in the specimen. I found that it closed its petals during the day, and bloomed only at night. At times of the full moon, it exhibited some form of luminescence. The most astonishing, yet eerie observation of this flower was that it seemed to snuff the very life out of any other type of plant I put next to it. I’d find previously healthy flowers withered the very next day when I done this. I was quite eager to report my findings to a close friend, and colleague of mine. I even began writing to him. But something in my mind had other plans. I resolved not to tell a soul about my findings until they were presented to the world. Some sort of wild competitiveness had taken hold of me. Dare I say it became an obsession? I began to ignore all other projects; all of my knowledge and interest soon became drained by this little delicate flower! Notes and letters of good-will found my desk, but none found a single reply of me. I was simply too transfixed by my seemingly unworldly prize to care about letting dear friends and family know of my safety (or lack thereof in haunting retrospect).

By the third month, I seldom left the confines of the cottage. This is also the time that the night-terrors began. Some nights, I’d feel something crawling under my skin, other nights I’d find my body in a state of paralysis, rendered blind and unable to speak. Even as such horrid visions and sensations left me exhausted and ill, I only cared about that dammed flower! Nothing else mattered at that point. It was as if I was being consumed. I don’t even I made into the middle of the fifth month of being out there in that abhorred field! Majority of that time became a blur for me, my dear reader. However, the worst experiences stayed with me, and to this day I wonder what kind of terror had befallen me, or what I even did to incur such a wrath.

One night as I slept, I heard a horrible crash in the front room. With only one thought present in my mind, I quickly leapt out of bed to make sure the flower was safe. I cared not about what danger may have invaded my secluded space, or even my own life! As I looked about the room I discovered that the pot that held my prized specimen had fallen to the floor. In terror, I jumped to the floor as quickly as I could to save it from any damage. When I saw it, it was the largest it had ever been. In full bloom, it glowed with an ethereal brilliance unlike the other times I’ve seen it in aglow. The room was flooded in nothing but the light of the full moon above. As I scooped the large flower up in my frail hands, I heard the floorboards creaking just a foot away. My movements became still, and it seemed like forever before I had the courage to avert my gaze from the floor. It was in that moment that my eyes gazed upon the most abhorred, wraith-like creature that not a living soul could imagine. Its face had dark hollows around eyes that looked of quicksilver! It’s mouth! So many sharp teeth protruding out from under its thin, almost transparent lips! Its bare body; pale with thousands of gray veins pulsing beneath its skin. It looked like some sort of creature that emerged from some sort of distant lunar vista! Before I could react, a root quickly dug its way into my exposed wrist. I gasped in pain as the flower’s grip grew tighter around my hands, binding them together. Panic surged through my shaken body as I struggled to stand to my feet. As I staggered, I began losing more and more energy. Every frenzied breath became harder and harder to draw in. Every movement felt like my limbs were becoming heavier. The creature began inching its way towards me. In my dimming vision, all I could do was look at the flower wrapped around my wrist. To my exhausted horror, it had begun turning red. I fainted.

I awoke in a padded cell somewhere in Venice. Without the slightest recollection of what happened between my terrifying encounter and when I was brought to the asylum, it felt like only the night before that I had been attacked. My friend and colleague had apparently found me a couple of days ago, delirious, bleeding, and mumbling incoherently while clutching a wilted flower to my chest. It was another month before I was able to reunite with my family. I told not a single soul about what had occurred, as I would have been locked away for the rest of my life. Even worse, all of my work would have been disregarded as the ramblings of a lunatic. The research that I did while out in that field just vanished. It was as if they disappeared off of the face of this Earth, or never existed at all. Perhaps rightfully so! I’d never want to even subject my rival to such a horrific experience. But even as I write this memoir, I do wonder still with such a damming curiosity of what had terrorized me. I shall never know. But whatever that monster was, it must have been born of the moon itself.


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Re: The Thing That Came From The Moon.

Post by JASON » June 24th, 2015, 3:00 pm

I kept reading right through to the end - no lie...
Your writing flows effortlessly (a sign of a good writer)
It was interesting and exciting and you definitely have something here...
The title is rubbish. 'nightshade' or something like that would work better...
Nicely done :smile:



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Re: The Thing That Came From The Moon.

Post by Pride Ed » June 25th, 2015, 1:25 am

Thank you so much for taking the time out to read! ^_^


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Re: The Thing That Came From The Moon.

Post by rupertpupkin » July 5th, 2015, 5:35 am

Hi. I really like the style here. Reminded me of Frankenstein or Dracula. I know we're not really supposed to critique on this board unless requested by the author but as stated above, the title needs changing. The rest is fine and i really enjoyed it. Keep em coming. I love a bit of good sci-fi. Sean.


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Re: The Thing That Came From The Moon.

Post by SabyCs » July 21st, 2015, 3:14 am

Already said by the readers,I do agree it was indeed an amazingly written.The whole story from start to end kept me intrigued.That was a nice style of writing.



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Re: The Thing That Came From The Moon.

Post by rupertpupkin » May 3rd, 2021, 11:00 am

Hi pride ed. Long time from you have been on here but I do remember this tale so well. There are a few typing errors but that said, its a wonderful story. I did compare it to dracula or frankenstein at the time but now I'm thinking HG Wells or even John Wyndham. Well done on the spotight


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