I can't imagine why

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I can't imagine why

Post by Keith » November 4th, 2016, 7:16 pm

I wanted to be a spider,
so I grew extra legs and made myself a web.
You said flies wouldn’t stick to grandma’s wool;
I came down from my corner.

I wanted to be a ferocious lion,
so I ruffled up my fur and prowled for my prey.
You said the front room rug was sheepskin;
I sheared myself.

I planned a dangerous expedition,
pitched my tent on a snowy mountain side.
You said if I got the sheet dirty you would smack me;
I left camp, crying.

She wanted to be a ballerina,
turning on tiptoes she danced with her hands.
I said we need net curtains and pink socks for ballet shoes;
The critics gave us rave reviews.
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Re: I can't imagine why

Post by shays1 » November 5th, 2016, 3:05 am

Ha! A bit of resentment here for little sister's success nontheless, an important part of it. I hope the speaker was able to fill his or her creative aspirations after leaving the nest. Nice read.


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Re: I can't imagine why

Post by allmirth » November 5th, 2016, 11:19 am

This is wonderful. Love the title. It is wonderfully layered. A sense of irony in the tone and how it plays with the idea of imagination. The final stanza melts my heart.

Thanks so much for sharing.
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Re: I can't imagine why

Post by Keith » November 6th, 2016, 5:52 am

shays1 wrote:Ha! A bit of resentment here for little sister's success nontheless, an important part of it. I hope the speaker was able to fill his or her creative aspirations after leaving the nest. Nice read.
Thank you reading and commenting shays1 much appreciated Keith



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Re: I can't imagine why

Post by Keith » November 6th, 2016, 5:53 am

allmirth wrote:This is wonderful. Love the title. It is wonderfully layered. A sense of irony in the tone and how it plays with the idea of imagination. The final stanza melts my heart.

Thanks so much for sharing.
Mirthy :lovey:
Many thanks allmirth very please the poem came across this way. Best Keith



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Re: I can't imagine why

Post by freepreacher » November 6th, 2016, 1:45 pm

Kind of really funny. Enjoyed it much and I found it rather heartwarming. Wanna get older again.


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Speak of the lonely.
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Re: I can't imagine why

Post by Keith » November 8th, 2016, 4:41 pm

freepreacher wrote:Kind of really funny. Enjoyed it much and I found it rather heartwarming. Wanna get older again.
Thank you free preacher I'm happy you enjoyed it, best keith.



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Re: I can't imagine why

Post by Ladywildalice » September 3rd, 2017, 3:10 pm

Isn't it odd? The things we remember about our siblings, our family, and our childhood? This is a entertaining write and well deserves the Spotlight. Congrats.


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