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Suicide

Post by phyzwiz » December 28th, 2016, 4:52 pm

I was depressed;
Contemplating suicide.
I had no gun,
Nor poison pill,
So I took a butter knife,
And spread myself to death.



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Re: Suicide

Post by devious83 » December 30th, 2016, 8:55 pm

ahahah

slow chuckle

inner reflecting

I found this funny.

Thanks.


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Re: Suicide

Post by nightseas » January 3rd, 2017, 12:34 am

Wow, what an awesome way to get your message across to the reader!

Nice work!



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Re: Suicide

Post by seraph1420 » January 5th, 2017, 9:38 am

i love the pun! i just can't stop laughing to be honest!
this is great work. well done

seraph



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Re: Suicide

Post by deadpoet » January 25th, 2017, 9:55 am

This raised an instant laugh. Great stuff; 'So I took a butter knife / And spread myself to death' - that's a line from a potential movie.



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Re: Suicide

Post by jamielou » January 27th, 2017, 12:24 pm

I didn't think that was a pun. I thought it was for real. If I decide to go early, I may try it to see if it works. Louise


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Re: Suicide

Post by phyzwiz » February 22nd, 2017, 2:57 pm

I've been away for bit, bit I'm back. Thank you all, nightseas, seraph1420, jamieloue and deadpoet. I'm glad you enjoyed this little diddy.



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Re: Suicide

Post by INFPoet » February 23rd, 2017, 3:09 pm

This is unexpected and funny! Where did you ever come up with the idea for it?

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Re: Suicide

Post by phyzwiz » February 23rd, 2017, 5:27 pm

I ripped it off. It was a punch line on a sit-com from the 80's. However, I did use it in a different context, so I don't claim plagiarism, just inspiration.



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Re: Suicide

Post by tangerinepie » April 2nd, 2017, 6:59 pm

Exquisitely awesome.However, would this be less painful than other methods?.. LOL..Such a satirical gem on a serious subject...well done..Tangie..


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Re: Suicide

Post by Ladywildalice » August 22nd, 2017, 8:25 pm

Well conceived in an imaginative mind, well constructed in stellar form, well presented with tongue in cheek, admirable and much enjoyed. Congratulations.


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