Slowly by dream!

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Slowly by dream!

Post by hidekazu inoue » May 8th, 2017, 10:25 am

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Even though the universe is distorted
Don’t get sucked into universal gravitation
Lightly, Lightly,
Slowly, slowly
Soon, softly
Jump
The lonely that humans could not do
Slowly, slowly
Fluttering, fluttering
Offering love to azalea
In a strange universe
The remaining lifetime
Slowly by dream!
Slowly by dream!
Dancing


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Re: Slowly by dream!

Post by S(OU)LAR » May 14th, 2017, 12:50 am

I remember a papilio protenor flying by that gave me an impression that I was watched.
Nice imagery that makes me want to go to the mountains. Thanks for sharing.



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Post by hidekazu inoue » May 16th, 2017, 10:31 am

S (OU) LAR: Thank you for your comment, I also posted it on facebook for Japanese, but this poem was very popular with retired people.


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Post by chairmanyang » August 5th, 2017, 3:40 am

Your poem left me feeling like I was floating along, very smooth and very serene.


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Post by AoR » August 8th, 2017, 8:24 pm

Gorgeous. Feels dreamy-ish and lovely. The fluttering gentleness is catchy!
"Lightly, Lightly,
Slowly, slowly
Soon, softly
Jump"

Love that transition, its' beautiful and startling. This piece has such a tender pulse! And great ending lines!


The one who isn't able to acknowledge his own self, will eventually fail.

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Re: Slowly by dream!

Post by hidekazu inoue » September 25th, 2017, 8:49 am

Thanks for Topic having been moved.


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Re: Slowly by dream!

Post by SilentTears » September 26th, 2017, 7:08 pm

Great flow, great imagery and soothing advice. Live and live well but it does not do to always jump quickly. Be gentle with yourself. Well done. Another pure and honest piece.


I let the sun on my skin.
Pretend I don't burn
I'm not burning here.
I just lay ash
On my eyelids,
And rub it deep into my
Bones.


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Re: Slowly by dream!

Post by hidekazu inoue » September 26th, 2017, 10:21 pm

Silent Tears, I appreciate the wonderful comments. Although words of organic matter and inorganic matter are not transmitted to humans, I think the idea that they are asking is as follows.
"From storm to light from clouds
Get new transparent energy
Please imply the shape to be faced with the person and the earth. "


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Re: Slowly by dream!

Post by The ghost » September 28th, 2017, 3:27 pm

Right now my thoughts defy gravity.
Soul- inspiring


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Re: Slowly by dream!

Post by hidekazu inoue » September 29th, 2017, 10:27 am

Hi! The ghost: Thank you for a wonderful comment.
To live is continuous of heavy pressure.
I made my poem with thanks for you.

"Poems"
be standing
jump up
be called I
The flower
Until it blooms


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