When you feel all hope’s lost
Melting like the last of winter’s frost
This world is filled with bad intentions, set to consume
Just keep a watchful eye to the sky
And brace your ears for the inevitable sonic boom
The last of his kind, the last son
The last of his kind, and our chosen one
Under our yellow sun
A visitor has become
Embodied light flooding out the dark
Hope and truth, the goodness in you
Ready to ignite with the faintest spark
Sent here to redeem, but not absolve
The last of his kind, with steel resolve
The savior takes shape
Donning a familiar crimson cape
Neither a god, nor a mere man far as all can tell
He seems something in between
The one bearing the sigil of the House of El
House of El
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Re: House of El
Pretty inspirational, this one. I enjoyed the interspersed couplets, allowing the reader to sense the motivations of the savior. I think I have a clue to whom you are referring, but I won't spoil it. (:
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Re: House of El
Hi. Very well written and I too enjoyed the little couples and thought that they worked very well. Nice poem.
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Re: House of El
Max -
Could see this piece as an alternative rock song by its construct.
Enjoyed the story immensly.
Well writ.
Could see this piece as an alternative rock song by its construct.
Enjoyed the story immensly.
Well writ.
Three for one will get it done.
(Three Comments per Post kidlets.)
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Re: House of El
Max: By reading this I can just picture our savior coming to Earth in the midst of sunbeams parting the dark clouds of our despair giving hope to all those who believe in the miracles of faith and what comes after. Loved this, but probably not only me but also: Jor-El, Kal-El, Jerry Siegel, Joe Shuster, Lois Lane, Jimmy Olsen, Richard Donner and maybe even Lex Luthor. NICE1! - Falstaff
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Re: House of El
I'm so glad that you all enjoyed this poem, I forgot how long ago I had written this :-)
“Travel is fatal to prejudice, bigotry, and narrow-mindedness.”
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--Mark Twain
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Re: House of El
Reminded me of Ying & Yang and the magically balanced universe inside and out. Much enjoyed. Thanks for sharing.
Down to Earth, Up to Universe.
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Re: House of El
This one is super, man. Very much enjoyed.
Gingerly, I write
Agent of Chaos - Prose'd
Be a law unto yourself
Be a society unto yourself
Be a religion unto yourself
Be unto yourself; Yourself!
Agent of Chaos - Prose'd
Be a law unto yourself
Be a society unto yourself
Be a religion unto yourself
Be unto yourself; Yourself!
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