Mortar.

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EvanCervantes
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Mortar.

Post by EvanCervantes » January 1st, 2019, 9:11 am

Everything is
Falling into place.
It might work out
For the best.
Except that,
Well, everything is
Falling.


And we're running
For cover...



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Re: Mortar.

Post by Liquid Bear » January 5th, 2019, 8:17 am

Mmh, cryptic but thought-provoking little poem. I wonder what's happening. My interest is piqued.

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Re: Mortar.

Post by CarolynKleefeld » January 11th, 2019, 10:39 pm

Clever composed, with feelings that I'm sure we can all relate to; succinctly expressed and much enjoyed.



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Re: Mortar.

Post by JASON » January 14th, 2019, 6:47 am

The word 'might' sure leans more to the half empty scenario...
New years resolutions and positive outlook and all that,
often blow to shreds... :wha:



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Re: Mortar.

Post by PowerForPeople » January 20th, 2019, 9:40 am

I like the end I like how it hints at humor. Good reading and find.



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Re: Mortar.

Post by jwesley » January 21st, 2019, 11:52 am

Like l.bear, my interest is piqued - sounds a little scifi'ish . . .


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Re: Mortar.

Post by rupertpupkin » May 27th, 2020, 10:35 pm

Very interesting piece. I love the title and the imagery of falling bricks that may or may not fall into place. Nice write and most deserving of a spotlight. Well done with this.


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Re: Mortar.

Post by Chelle » May 28th, 2020, 7:39 pm

honesly I love the false confidence of this piece. we are lulled into this sense of security and then bam! everything is not what it seems which is often the case in reality. I feel like this often especially these days. a simple poem but a powerful message


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Re: Mortar.

Post by entwife » May 29th, 2020, 10:55 am

really great change up. deserves to be spotlighted.


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