Astounded

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Max.velocity
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Astounded

Post by Max.velocity » May 17th, 2020, 5:16 am

The king of coins wins again:
desolate, The hand I’m dealt;
Cruelly, he craftily marked my cards,
And I’m left to tighten my belt.

Each time I hope, not this time,
Just a small win to get by;
But the king owns a cold-stacked deck,
His riffle and cut Is sly.

The table is cleared to start again,
The king readily cuts my purse;
Twists of fate beyond my control ;
This my wage slave curse.

©️A Kelly 2020



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Re: Astounded

Post by dwells » May 18th, 2020, 10:04 pm

Few inveterate gamblers retire soon enough to cut their losses to a manageable level I'm afraid MV. All part of the tyranny of wages in a system that favors the house. Cheers MV - Dan


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Re: Astounded

Post by Liquid Bear » May 24th, 2020, 5:05 am

A most appropriate metaphor for what is indeed a cruel game. Reminded me of Megadeth's "Train of Consequences". Well done.

Bear


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"I cry out for magic/I feel it dancing in the light/It was cold/Lost my hold/To the shadows of the night" (Ronnie James Dio)

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Re: Astounded

Post by rupertpupkin » June 19th, 2020, 7:59 pm

Cracking poem. Well done on the spotlight


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Max.velocity
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Re: Astounded

Post by Max.velocity » June 21st, 2020, 7:05 pm

I got the spotlight?????? I’m so honoured!



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Re: Astounded

Post by rupertpupkin » June 22nd, 2020, 3:20 am

Well deserved! Congrats!


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