Moon Phantoms

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Moon Phantoms

Post by Oli21 » October 25th, 2015, 12:03 am

On a rainy, nightly hour
Standing solemn, in the shower
Dreaming of a lunar terrace
High upon a mountain range

Suddenly, the cell grows colder
Then a phantom grabs my shoulder
All the while the faucet hastens
Unbeknownst to whence it changed

I look around and notice, vaguely
All surroundings have displaced thee
No more dreaming I've concluded
Teleported to the moon

Gazing out unto the splendid
Blackened void from whence it'd ended
Now the planet floats and falters
Like a nitrogen balloon

Whilst the dust below my feet stands
Strangely, no wind howls on these lands
Nor a breath I've taken since time
Has transcended to this place

From this post the earth seems distant
A world not loved until this instant
Thus I long for all the wonders
Of a home that's been replaced

"Am I dead? Whence comes this landscape?"
Lead to Zion not to escape
Then upon the moon's horizon
Once again In meet the ghost

"Why have you brought me to heaven?"
Asking with a need of reason
The phantom grins and hugs me tightly
As if some angelic host

He speaks to me with echoed voices
"You've come here by your own choices"
"A dream it's not, nor nightmare is it"
Then placed his hand against my face

Now once more I'm made to wonder
Why would heaven be so somber?
Surely there has been no spirit
Sent to live in outer space

He assures me I'm mistaken
To heaven's not where I've been taken
But a realm where thieves shall saunter
Seeming all the more surreal

Still confused, I close my eyelids
Then awaken from this childish
Planetary mystic island
Underneath the shower, still

Knowing now the ghost was lying
T'was a dream he kept denying
But no reason's beyond dreaming
Can excuse these missing hours

Then I read upon the mirror
Foggy, written with the finger
Of the phantom, words that promised
"We'll come back for what is ours"



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Re: Moon Phantoms

Post by Spear_Sister » October 26th, 2015, 3:49 am

Really enjoyed the tempo of this piece. I was taken on a journey to the moon and back, and left with that lingering feeling of unease. What phantoms do lie in the shadows, and our imaginations...
Very cleverly put together. Thanks for the read.


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Re: Moon Phantoms

Post by Chelle » November 1st, 2015, 8:27 pm

very spooky! love it especially this time of year. the ending was also rather creepy and the language choice led to an ethereal feel for sure.


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Re: Moon Phantoms

Post by robema1 » November 7th, 2015, 8:14 pm

From a hitchhikers mind it seems to be.

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Re: Moon Phantoms

Post by SilentTears » October 19th, 2017, 10:02 pm

Great flow and interesting topic. It's like a day dream mixed with a demonic abduction. At first I was quite taken with the imagery and all the pretty views, but it got spooky and sinister there at the end and made me almost uncomfortable. Well done! Welcome to TPS!

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Re: Moon Phantoms

Post by Josie » October 22nd, 2017, 9:09 pm

This fourteen stanza poem called 'Moon Phantoms' seems appropriate for October and the Halloween atmosphere. Each stanza has four lines each with the rhyming scheme AABC. The last line end rhymes with the last line of the next stanza.

While standing in a shower, Narrator dreams a phantom grabs him by the shoulder and causes him to believe he has been teleported to the moon. After conversing with the phantom he ends up back in his shower and sees a finger writing a cryptic message on the mirror, "We'll come back for what is ours" This was a strange, shadowy ending and appropriate for the tale.


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