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khurram
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Dissatisfaction

Post by khurram » August 17th, 2016, 9:16 am

It was meant to be a
smooth summer, speaking with
us of bees and spent coldness.
But we blinked and it's nearly
over. No king of happy
heat, I moan the myth that
was woven for this season.
What is the reason for
summer's scam, dodge
and derision?
As autumn wanders towards
us, we ask summer why
it sang such a brief song.



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Re: Dissatisfaction

Post by albatoss » August 20th, 2016, 12:58 am

I love this one, sometimes we just want the summer to stay, especially where I live where it's cold and snowy almost 5 months a year. Nicely written, keep sharing!


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Re: Dissatisfaction

Post by wordsmith » August 24th, 2016, 8:12 am

Each summers day is a blessing for soon
the autumn will cast it aside
and we regret its passing
much enjoyed
*M*


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Re: Dissatisfaction

Post by candlewitch » September 6th, 2016, 11:35 am

hello,

I really liked this piece, for it reinforces the passage of good times. may I advise that you capture a memory of your summer days, and keep it in your heart? good work!

always, Cat


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Re: Dissatisfaction

Post by CarolynKleefeld » September 19th, 2016, 6:58 pm

Ah yes, our moments in the summer sunshine always seem briefer than they should.Beautifully composed and much enjoyed.



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Re: Dissatisfaction

Post by Liquid Bear » September 21st, 2016, 10:51 am

Never been a fan of summer, and neither are you, from what I gather. Still, it's indeed true that time flies when you're having fun. Make the most of these great memories, however fleeting, and remember that summer will be back again to bring about new chances!

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"I cry out for magic/I feel it dancing in the light/It was cold/Lost my hold/To the shadows of the night" (Ronnie James Dio)

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