The State of Play

[Royston Vasey]

The State of Play

The angels wept: as men forsaking
Their Master's Word, with heaven-breaking
Defiant acts, saw Satan waking.
So disbelief is always noted -

As when a church bell ceases ringing
Or when a choir abstains from singing
Their gospel songs, we will be clinging
To Godless ways. We're ill-devoted.

With our deliverance fast-fading,
Eclipsed by our dark thoughts, so shading
Mankind from Truth -- then -- serenading
Mischief - badness tastes sugar-coated.


Go well.

[ThePoetryQueen]

Great! Awesome! Loved it! Nice flow! Great message!!! :)

[karrie]

Oh my this is wonderful! Much enjoyed reading.

[Philip16]

Really enjoyed the rhyme scheme...and the warning.
Thanks for sharing this one.
Philip16

[Ladywildalice]

Quite a well delivered message indeed and much enjoyed. Thanks.

[Royston Vasey]

ThePoetryQueen, Karrie, Philip16 and ladywildalice,

Thank you all for the positive (well, Ladywildalice's was "quite" positive, lol) feedback.


Go well.

[miraj]

Great message with a wonderful rhyme scheme.

[SirFleshwound]

Captivates the reader from beginning to end with cleverly phrased messages. Conclusion....that we cannot prevent straying from the path...its in our nature. Very nice.

[Royston Vasey]

Hi miraj, slarsen and SirFleshwound,

Thanks for your comments (which were nice),
I'm pleased you found my work sans vice.
I write because it seems I can,
But often things don't go to plan,
And then I ponder what Keats said -
Of hard-fought leaves when sense has fled -
I'll tell myself that what births hard
Is probably a tub of lard.


Go well.

[Royston Vasey]

Hi djk,

Thanks for your kind words.


Go well.

[Dew]

RV...a few thoughts and observations...

First...reminded of Poe...and that is the highest compliment I can pay!
Second...wonderfully outlined message...not a forced syllable
Third...a rhumpunt in iambic tetrameter-feminine? Masterful.

Bravo! - Dew

[dornicks]

Eloquent and accurate, neatly wrapped in a well delivered rhyme scheme. It speaks volumes. Thank you for sharing this,

dornicks

[Royston Vasey]

Hi Dew and dornicks,

Thanks to both of you for your kind words.


Go well.

[inflames]

This is really well executed. I adore this writing style. Congrats on your spotlight!

[up2quark]

The way we have fallen from grace yet still hold onto the old ways is refelcted well in your lines. Great work.

[Patdolan83]

Loved the rhyme in this...and the context is equally as impressive
Congrats on the spotlight

[ladymaybebaby]

wow, so much to say... I normally don't read much from the enlightenment board. Not because of my views, just don't want to ever get caught up in a disagreement. This piece is so special and different. Your views are so straight on and that's sad that more people don't see or realize what is happening all around them. Where is the humanity? I think you can see part of the answers in your piece. It's a wonderful slant look at the truth. Well written indeed. You didn't preach, scare, scream; you wove a lovely piece of poetry with a message that is sitting there for us to pay attention to. Much deserved spotlight choice! Congratulations!!!

-LMB
xoxo

[musie]

Where in the world was I when this was first posted.. Royston, this was beautiful! I can see why it got so many responses and now the Spotlight...Well deserved my friend...such an insightful and uplifting piece with a great message..CONGRATS on the Spotlight! Musie

[everhopeful]

Although this is a relatively short piece of poetry, I don't think any of the readers feel short-changed. In fact, there's an epic feel to this through the theme alone, and perhaps it's only the way I read it, but I felt like there was a touch of subtle humour in that final line, it felt a little more grounded and tongue in cheek than the lines which came before.
Another enjoyable read from you, congratulations on the spotlight!