Brutality of Man

[enaeem12]

As the dark and hidden predator,
snarled at its pitiful prey,
the gaze shattered all hope
and all he could do was pray:

But God made this land to bewilder all human nation
By showing the starlight and dazzle of his creation,

But those damned men are merely hollows
and their comprehension is as follows:
For night without rest assures you of death,
and days without regret make you Macbeth.

And such a plural hole is in the heart of man,
For even savage beasts can not copy the brutality of his hands,
for how so could others understand Gods plan
When us humans fear, losing even a few of what we can

[SwingingPistol]

This is great! Seamless flow, wonderful rhyme and very intriguing subject matter. Thank you for sharing!

SP

[everhopeful]

This is a great fit for the darkness board, I agree that man is definitely the most brutal of all predators on the planet, and this poem emphasises the animal-like nature within humanity.

[ladylilith]

'The evil that men do' - I really like the more real direction this takes, like Everhopeful says, I think the human race is probably the most brutal and terrifying predator on Earth. I really enjoyed the references in this piece too, to Macbeth especially. Real cool work!

Lily^^

[trace]

Very nice work. Well thought out and executed with a spiritual bent.

[enaeem12]

Everhopeful I have been meaning to ask, that I could not find many of my poems that I posted, I am really worried as this site was the only medium I placed my work on

[ladylilith]

I've sent you a PM -x-

[songofmeadow]

Congratulations on the spotlight, a well thought out darkness poem, meadow

[Hem]

Terrific literary composition. I enjoyed the subject and think this has a witty tone. Bravo for the Spotlight!

[gooseberry]

Congrats on the spotlight and well deserved.Brutality is a word used perfectly here to describe the all too familiar nature of much of man's deeds on this planet.

[Ladywildalice]

Congratulations on the spotlight for this well deserving piece. Though a difficult thing to read, the truthfulness of it, it is indeed an apt description of the sad state of humankind in many instances. Thank you

[Royston Vasey]

Hi enaeem12,

Interesting poem. Yes, man can be pretty beastly, but, conversely, he is capable of creating great beauty. Odd. Your line which mentions Macbeth (S3, L4 - "and days without regret make you Macbeth.") seemingly has its facts muddled. Macbeth's conscience drove him to distraction.

Congrats on the spotlight and thanks for the read.


Go well.

[Sasha]

Congrats on the Spotlight!
Very well penned, and thought provoking with wise touch in a saddening truth.

Sash

[everhopeful]

Congratulations on the spotlight, I enjoyed the chance to re-read this!

[enaeem12]

Your line which mentions Macbeth (S3, L4 - "and days without regret make you Macbeth.") seemingly has its facts muddled. Macbeth's conscience drove him to distraction.

Yes I Believe Man does create wondrous things but my poem emphasizes upon the fact that he is also the most brutal animal on the planet. We carve, we peel and some more horrible do things beyond comprehension. Upon the Matter of Macbeth he is a man driven from pride and he on many occasions shows brutality and does not care for his fellow man that is the feeling I emphasized. When upon hearing his wife`s death he does not weep, that feeling of not caring for a loved one is not misdirection but a complete loss of moral values that is where man becomes truly brutal the day he does not regret anything that day he cares for nothing, He says go to Hell with it.

[trace]

Congratulations on the spotlight! Does that come with a cash prize????? Kidding. I like this piece very much. Well thought out and executed.

[moe]

congrats well deserved honor

[enaeem12]

Thank you every one

[musie]

WoW! I thought this to be exquisitely written with a great deal of thought and depth of emotion...the formatting rhythm and rhyme scheme were spot on as well as the imagery fly's out to the reader and truly capture's the attention....Excellent write! Congrat's on the spotlight! Musie

[enaeem12]

Thank you, hope to write better pieces in the future.