Lapse.

[inflames]

• i'm not insane.
  
  • just a bit tossed up:
    writing words ndsıpǝ poʍu
    and sdrawkcab.
  not just, not right,
  not suffocating, nor
  dying.
  
  just allowing myself a little
  
  lap
  
  se in judgement, once in awhile.
  
  • i'm done with this.
    i'm not insane.

[bugo]

Sometimes it's good to go insane for awhile, just for a little change of scenery. Really what harm will a few lapses do in the long run?

Nice piece.

[everhopeful]

The lapse was forgetting to tell me you posted something new :p
Only you could bring a feeling like apathy to life in such a way, because the descriptions of everything it isn't kinda suggested this lapse is something short of a tempest, but still meaningful in it's own way. I can't help but feel if there's an element of this which yearns for some insanity though, even knowing it's not good for the system.
Loved the formatting and presentation, and how you achieve so much with relatively few words.
Welcome back to posting poetry! :)

[Sasha]

Oh, this is clever work!
I so like the formatting too, as it fits with the theme, and how you started it with a statement, affirming it, then final conclusion.
Intriguing, and just brilliant on its own way!
Love reading you again!

Sash

[ladylilith]

So now I have Avenged Sevenfold's 'Almost Easy' trapped in my head.. But my poor choice in music aside, this is indeed very clever work. I always eagerly click on your writes, hoping to see something quirky with the formatting at least and my gosh didn't you just deliver here? Heh. But boring format talk aside, the content is fabulous. A confident, striking statement reached with a slight stretch in the middle.. Heck, that makes no sense.. I'm forever in a 'lapse' methinks..

So what I'm trying to say is that this piece completely enraptured me. Not one word is wasted.

Lil
x

[miraj]

awesome presentation with some really clever lines,great write.

[inflames]

Thanks, everyone. :)


Sorry for not warning you, Mick. Haha. Next time.

[SwingingPistol]

Nicely done, Flamey. I love how you construct your poetry, by the way. So intriguing! I think this piece very clever; the erratic structure contrasts boldly with the intended message. Very awesome!

[jeremyf]

Welcome to TPS! It is always great to see new members join our community...............hahaha. Welcome back sister. It is a joy to see your new work once again gracing the boards of TPS. This one struck a chord with me being that the format was just a titch reminiscent of one of my personal favs, ee cummings. Poetry that is just as much meant to been "seen" as "read" is a very cool concept for me. Your layout works great for the content and was pulled off in impressive Flamey style.

[Luponero]

"I am not insane" like your trying to convince yourself. brilliant write flames. always loving your work.

[inflames]

Thanks, all! Your comments are too kind. I appreciate your words a lot. Thanks. :)

[matches]

Hey Flamey,

I have just read your work.
Thank you for the best laugh I've had this week so far.
Excellent work here,


until...

[JingleBelle]

I love this! Flamey, you are the master of using formatting to enhance your meaning. I love the ending message as well, that a small lapse in judgement is okay. Excellent work, as always.


Flower of Poetic Excellence.

[shadowedeyes]

Oh K, my friend, way to tap into aesthetics - absolutely LOVED this. The format, the indentations, playing with font, all of it had my jumping up and down excitedly pointing at the screen with glee.

Another stunner. Missed your work.

H x

[queenjellybean]

As SE said, this was so visually appealing, the form was great and really made me hone in to the meaning behind this piece. It's so good to read your work again.

[nortan223]

Whacky good fun!! I think I'll try and have a few lapses like that - it clears the mind.
T h A N
K U

[inflames]

Thanks, all! Glad to have some reviews from some of my favourite people. Thanks for all of the kind comments.

[Patdolan83]

Brilliant! I missed this when you first posted it, I'm glad it was put under the spotlight
I love a little bit crazy to go with my day

[inflames]

Thanks all!


There's a website that will switch the text for you so you can write upside down. I just used that and copy and pasted.