Solitary Drunk

Post by **Lonnie** » October 30th, 2012, 6:40 pm

My deepest thanks to you for reading this and leaving such kind words!

Post by **musie** » October 31st, 2012, 5:24 am

Oh my! this was SO well written....Great imagery and sure brought back some old memories for me....This flowed so smoothly in both rhythm and rhyme I can see why it got Spotlighted! CONGRATULATION'S! Musie

Post by **Jahaliel** » October 31st, 2012, 5:59 am

A really wonderful piece. The detail came alive with each stanza painting a vivid portrait. Very much enjoyed.

Post by **Lonnie** » October 31st, 2012, 9:12 am

My deepest thanks to both musie and jahaliel for their kind words!

Post by **karrie** » November 1st, 2012, 5:24 am

Such captivating imagery in this! Well done and congrats on the spotlight

Post by **Lonnie** » November 1st, 2012, 5:37 am

Thank you! Still trying to see after being blinded by your script! LOL!!

Post by **nortan223** » November 1st, 2012, 10:58 am

The quiet soft rhythm of this moving poem reminded me of hearing a solitary saxophone in an Army jazz club during the interval, as we quietly yearned for home. We may not have necessarily been drunk, but the melancholy was the same.
A marvellous piece of writing that can only evoke sympathy for those that are unable to cope without the support of alcohol. It fully deserved its Spotlight.

--Norman--

Post by **everhopeful** » November 1st, 2012, 12:03 pm

Excellent form in this one really enhances an already strong piece of poetry, the mix of internal and end rhyme is always very distinctive on the ear and makes for a lyrical, melodious read which only serves to enhance the mood. The shift in the latter stanzas from something reminscing to a more lamenting poem is concluded with the painful, poignant final line.
Excellent work, congratulations on the spotlight!

Post by **songofmeadow** » November 1st, 2012, 1:22 pm

aaah, well deserved spotlight, there is so much to love, relate to and sympathise with and the rhythm suited the projected tone perfectly, loved it! meadow

Post by **Lonnie** » November 1st, 2012, 2:26 pm

My deepest thank yous to norman, evrhopeful, JustinsDayOff, and songofmeadow for their kind and generous comments!

Post by **Rosella** » November 1st, 2012, 10:57 pm

I like how this poem rhymes, it nails well of emotions about bar. I enjoy. :)

Post by **Lonnie** » November 1st, 2012, 11:35 pm

Thank you very much, Rosella!

Post by **swclark1977** » November 8th, 2012, 2:39 pm

Reminded me of an old Tom Waits song. Very cool

Post by **the quiet poet** » January 14th, 2013, 10:28 am

Too young to enter a bar, but I still know how it feels to drown my sorrows in booze... could feel the emotion in this. good work

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