Battle Symbol.

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Battle Symbol.

Post by inflames » October 12th, 2012, 3:05 pm

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A/N: I apologize for the fact this is in image form. The poem called for very intricate and detailed formatting in order to fully achieve its purpose and I wanted to be able to display it that way. Unfortunately, this site just does not allow for such intricate formatting, so I had to get creative! I hope the fact this is in an image doesn't take away from the poem itself (honestly, I think it perhaps adds something). I hope it's not too hard to read. You can click on the image to enlarge it. :)

Anyway, I hope you enjoy! Thanks. :)


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Re: Battle Symbol.

Post by SwingingPistol » October 12th, 2012, 4:23 pm

Wow! This was epic in it's form. I love how you create your forms to emphasize on the message. And those last two lines? Dang, girl. Excellent work here, think I'll be bookmarking!



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Re: Battle Symbol.

Post by Dew » October 12th, 2012, 5:03 pm

WWWWOOOOOWWWWW!!!!!

You blew my MIND with this one! And I mean brains and bone fragments lodged in the drywall behind me! I loved the invitation and how it leads like a stairway down into your thoughts...I had so much fun trying to find the right way to look at it...backwards, downwards, turned over, upside down! The intellectual symbols for paradigm-breaking and boat-rocking were unmistakably written, literally, all over the page! How wonderful...thank you for such mental and emotional pleasure!

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Re: Battle Symbol.

Post by everhopeful » October 13th, 2012, 11:02 am

Haha, this is genius! Notwithstanding the board choice and the twisted menace, this is really a poem to make this reader smile. As I've said with other formatted pieces, the two most important elements are that the format adds to the message (which is a tick here) and that the words used along the way are worthwhile (another tick) - however, the latter element might slightly contradict the playful message of your poem!
Excellent stuff.



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Re: Battle Symbol.

Post by Jahaliel » October 15th, 2012, 4:29 am

What a brilliant piece of formatting and an amazing poem too, it's so wonderful to read, I love the wists and turns. Very very well done.


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Re: Battle Symbol.

Post by ladylilith » October 17th, 2012, 1:04 pm

Oh gee, Flamey, there's no one that can do it like you when it comes to intricate and careful formatting. And then when you deliver in content too, it's a double whammy. It's devious, in the sens ethat the exciting structure forces the reader to focus on the words more, I mean, you have to, if you're gonna read backwards! Ha!

I really like this. Not only do you provide something fresh and exciting to look at, it's jus the same when it comes to the read!

Lily^^


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Re: Battle Symbol.

Post by inflames » October 19th, 2012, 4:25 pm

Thanks, all! Glad you enjoyed reading it despite the awkward formatting issues I had. Thanks for all your comments and insights. :)


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Re: Battle Symbol.

Post by moe » October 20th, 2012, 3:55 am

It very well could be that I'm stupid but alas & alack I lack the wits to make sense of this as for a picture??? What picture?



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Re: Battle Symbol.

Post by Lonnie » October 20th, 2012, 4:55 pm

Decidedly different and very intriguing! It takes one to places that most poems cannot hope to travel to!



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Re: Battle Symbol.

Post by inflames » October 23rd, 2012, 1:53 am

Thanks, Lonnie!


Moe- I just meant that the poem is posted as an image rather than as text...


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Re: Battle Symbol.

Post by devil » October 23rd, 2012, 5:51 am

EPIC! Very creative. Much enjoyed


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Re: Battle Symbol.

Post by ShaneWells » October 31st, 2012, 10:13 pm

Loved the layout, ten fold. Thank you


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Re: Battle Symbol.

Post by musie » November 1st, 2012, 8:11 am

WoW! I JUST DO NOT HAVE ANY idea how you did this, but it's epic! EXALT my friend..for an extremely creative piece of work.....Musie


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Re: Battle Symbol.

Post by inflames » November 6th, 2012, 1:47 pm

Thank you, all. :) Much appreciated. The comments on the form of the poem are amazing and mean a lot to me. Thanks!


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Re: Battle Symbol.

Post by ladymaybebaby » December 16th, 2012, 12:01 pm

First congratulations on a well deserved spotlight choice! Your formatting always amazes me! My strengths are centering and italics! I will admit it took me a while to decode the poem itself, I was going sideways, diagonal, and everywhich way going, but I finally got it! I think you put in so much quality to your work, that when you post something we all flock to read it! This was an adventure and much enjoyed!

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Re: Battle Symbol.

Post by bushpoet » December 16th, 2012, 5:27 pm

G'day ladymaybebaby. Very creative and away from the norm. Congratulations on your spotlight.


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Re: Battle Symbol.

Post by inflames » December 16th, 2012, 7:22 pm

Thanks lady maybe- I appreciate your kind words! I'm glad you put in the effort to understand this!

Thanks for the congrats (and to who put this in the spotlight)- I'm thrilled!



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Re: Battle Symbol.

Post by Dew » December 16th, 2012, 10:32 pm

Where it belongs!



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Re: Battle Symbol.

Post by SirFleshwound » December 17th, 2012, 1:34 am

That was sooooo much fun to read....like a Poetic Sudoku puzzle:) The formatting most certainly adds a completely new dimension to the readers pleasure, yet...the strength of the words and phrasing make it a poem of excellence in its own right. Amazing. Congratulations.



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Re: Battle Symbol.

Post by tangerinepie » December 17th, 2012, 6:55 am

Inflames..I am... I think the word is flummoxed by this brain teaser.What an inventive way to get your message across, and the work it must have taken to achieve it..Still dazed..LOL..Spotlight heaven..Exalt..Tangie..


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