"Lipstick Merlot (Voila Viola)"

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"Lipstick Merlot (Voila Viola)"

Post by blueinferno07 » December 13th, 2012, 1:50 pm

Cold crystal stemware staggers to my salient lips.
Lipstick smears my bottle of Merlot
where an angel built from sour grapes kissed it gently,
whispering somber poetry on the chilly wind.
The grass is lush and abundant,
running through my fingers like a head of freshly conditioned hair
on a damp, Earthy scalp.
Voila Viola:
Strings play softly in the murky distance,
notes dance on the sky, painted with stars
in a strange marriage of symphony and mosaic.
Fireflies rave before my outstretched blanket
laid out in checkerboard and plaid.
I toast the night sky, pregnant with your visage,
resting my arm on a concrete stone
which bears your name.
Voila Viola:
My lover, thus inscribed,
whom eternity had fitted for a burial gown
on a humid August evening
six months before.
I pour Merlot onto her Earth,
and watch the ground drink its fill,
Mother Nature taking her taste so she may
ferry it on to cold, blue lips.
I ask for a kiss, and a butterfly rests upon my cheek,
a gift from you, my bygone love.
Voila Viola:
Abracadabra is how you left,
alakazam how you depart,
and in the cloud of ensuing smoke I stagger drunk
with lipstick smeared Merlot.
Voila Viola:
Happy anniversary, wherever you fly,
or float,
or wherever rests your incorporeal essence,
or in whatever nothingness you now thrive.
Cheers, salud, and happy anniversary
you ghost of my starving heart.



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Post by ladylilith » December 13th, 2012, 2:07 pm

This is just divine. There's something almost classic about the mood and tone of this piece, like the best parts of Romantic and Gothic infused with a modern layout and diction. The repetition of the name is really effective and I also enjoyed the emphasis on the setting, the descriptions so easy to sink into and just be lulled along with melancholy.. If such a thing is possible! It felt to me like the speaker was being warmed by wine, and it makes things glow around the edges, but the loss and heartache doesn't leave. It's maybe softened? I dunno. It was a really affecting piece. Thank you for sharing it!!

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Post by Sasha » December 13th, 2012, 4:55 pm

That's breathtaking!!
I was really taken by such fantastic imagery, painting a very saddening portrait of lost love. Elegant wording, creating an aristocratic feelings, and I'm really taken away by this wonderful piece of work!
Beautiful, beautiful poem! I'll bookmark it :)
Thank you!

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Post by blueinferno07 » December 13th, 2012, 10:59 pm

Thank you both, I'm glad you enjoyed it :)



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Post by TheManInTheSuit » December 14th, 2012, 4:19 pm

My goodness this piece was amazing. The imagery was just incredible throughout this entire story and it was just so so sad, hahaha sorry for my lack of adjectives. It was just so dark and depressing and it grew the further I read. Annnnnd I dunno hahaha, I am struggling to produce some words, but alas they have fled me. Just incredible!


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Post by khurram » December 14th, 2012, 5:28 pm

blueinferno07 wrote:
Cold crystal stemware staggers to my salient lips.
Lipstick smears my bottle of Merlot
where an angel built from sour grapes kissed it gently,
whispering somber poetry on the chilly wind.
The grass is lush and abundant,
running through my fingers like a head of freshly conditioned hair
on a damp, Earthy scalp.
Voila Viola:
Strings play softly in the murky distance,
notes dance on the sky, painted with stars
in a strange marriage of symphony and mosaic.
Fireflies rave before my outstretched blanket
laid out in checkerboard and plaid.
I toast the night sky, pregnant with your visage,
resting my arm on a concrete stone
which bears your name.
Voila Viola:
My lover, thus inscribed,
whom eternity had fitted for a burial gown
on a humid August evening
six months before.
I pour Merlot onto her Earth,
and watch the ground drink its fill,
Mother Nature taking her taste so she may
ferry it on to cold, blue lips.
I ask for a kiss, and a butterfly rests upon my cheek,
a gift from you, my bygone love.
Voila Viola:
Abracadabra is how you left,
alakazam how you depart,
and in the cloud of ensuing smoke I stagger drunk
with lipstick smeared Merlot.
Voila Viola:
Happy anniversary, wherever you fly,
or float,
or wherever rests your incorporeal essence,
or in whatever nothingness you now thrive.
Cheers, salud, and happy anniversary
you ghost of my starving heart.
Very engrossing. Pleasure to read. Keep up the good work.



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Post by jsol » December 16th, 2012, 11:38 am

Very clever poem, very well-written. It's a sad image of the speaker picnicing all alone at night with wine, toasting the sky in remembrance of a love dead and gone. There's bitterness, the "sour grapes," expressed at the loved one's dying which makes the whole thing very human and which really made the poem work for me. The language is full and maneuvers deftly throughout. Much enjoyed.



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Post by ladymaybebaby » December 16th, 2012, 11:48 am

First congratulation on the spotlight pick, so well deserved! This has a haunting sadness that just grips the reader, but it has a beauty to it as well. That is were you come in. Your images are divine, your words are like something from a long ago age. I imagine it being a poem written on parchment and left on a Victorian pillow hundreds of years ago, for someone to find... It is very lovely... I enjoyed each and every line!

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Post by blueinferno07 » December 16th, 2012, 3:22 pm

Thanks so much everyone :) It's an honor



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Post by bushpoet » December 16th, 2012, 5:42 pm

Congratulations blueinferno07 on your poem getting the spotlight. Let's hope your character's love of Merlot is not measured by the outcome of bygone relationships. It's a nice drop but ...


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Post by inflames » December 16th, 2012, 7:24 pm

I love the ending! Very creative use of repetition here. Nicely done! Congrats on the spotlight!



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Post by SirFleshwound » December 17th, 2012, 1:39 am

That last line is still echoing within my mind...It is truly memorable and gives me goosebumps. I am a massive fan of strong endings and this one had it in spades. Memorable work. very well done on the spotlight.



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Post by tangerinepie » December 17th, 2012, 6:47 am

An absolutely brilliant write that left me sighing with pleasure.The choice of words dazzling and I must say one of the most touching poems I have read in ages.Congrats on the spotlight and the wonder you have created..T..


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Post by Hem » December 18th, 2012, 2:53 pm

Rich in language and simply a pleasure to read over and over. Kudos!


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Post by wendellgee » December 23rd, 2012, 2:04 am

Brilliant. It reads like Merlot. Which is to say, the wine permeates the sense of the poem.



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Post by musie » December 23rd, 2012, 8:36 am

Boy! There is not too much more I can say that has not already been said about this exquisite and intriguing piece of work....It most definitely deserving of the Spotlight...CONGRATULATIONS! Musie


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Post by blueinferno07 » December 23rd, 2012, 4:32 pm

Just once more, let me thank you all :) I am humbled by your kind words, truly



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Post by jainrohit » December 24th, 2012, 10:29 am

the repetition of voila voila is really voila voila ........ these leaves the same effect as one has after reading rumi , since he was master of using refrains like "my beloved has come , my beloved has come "....

the word choice is just great ,,,, congrats for writing such a great piece


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Post by ladylilith » December 24th, 2012, 12:32 pm

I loved this when I first read it and I still love it now. So so glad this got Spotlighted!!!

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