Mother

Post by **Pro** » April 28th, 2012, 3:05 am

I am
Because of you.

I made you laugh as an infant.
I made you crazy as a teenager.
I made you cry during my 20's.
I made you lonely during my 30's.
I surprised you in my 40's.
I sat with you in my 50's.

Mother

I know you can hear me.
I am here with you
By your side.
I love you.
Breathe your last breath
While I hold your hand.

(Like I pointed out in the original post of this piece - I am not in my 40's or 50's)

Post by **Jahaliel** » April 28th, 2012, 6:50 am

Something very sweet about this, made me think about watching my dad sit with his mum who had alzheimers. Simple and beautiful Pro. xx

Post by **queenjellybean** » April 28th, 2012, 9:13 pm

The repetition added a deliberateness to your words and message. The form of this, with the word "Mother" alone as a stanza of its own stresses the weight of your words. I liked this sweet piece.

Post by **Mizuchi** » May 1st, 2012, 3:13 pm

I like that second stanza, very creative and at the same time recognizable. The ending was sad and somewhat of a mood whiplash, but it's overall a very touching poem.

Post by **Whiskurz** » May 3rd, 2012, 2:31 pm

I really enjoyed this my friend.....Whisk

Post by **Jovel320** » January 3rd, 2015, 5:10 pm

Great sentiment and something we can all identify with. I know some of us made our mother's go through more than others, but overall we all have our faults. I love the way you brought this around to siting and holding mother's hand. She probably did the same countless of times and in a way is a sort of repayment for that. A very insightful and tender piece. Thanks for sharing!!!
Jovel

My Work · Post by **Valentine** » January 6th, 2015, 8:40 pm

I sat with my mom when she nearly died with cancer. She fooled everyone by living another 20 years.
Yet I would do it all again just to see her face. valentine

Post by **Ladywildalice** » January 9th, 2015, 5:57 pm

A poet does not necessarily have to be or experience the words he/she writes. It is the talent of that writer that gives life, body, and senses to what is written, so it seems to be a very personal experience. In that way, we can all connect to it. You are an exceptional writer and I always enjoy your work. This was lovely, tender, touching and enviable.

Post by **Mr D** » January 9th, 2015, 9:41 pm

Great write. Minimalistic I could say. Very evocative.

Post by **rupertpupkin** » February 10th, 2020, 6:51 am

Lovely write. I miss your unique style and I miss your wonderful poetry. Well done on a very worthy spotlight

Mother

Re: Mother

Re: Mother

Re: Mother

Re: Mother

Re: Mother

Re: Mother

Re: Mother

Re: Mother

Re: Mother