Zeus's Calamity
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Look at you,
glowing upon a new day,
A Goddess left on earth in the wake of Zeus's calamity,
curing the once parched lands,
You are the temptation that no mortal can conjure,
so I stare,
lost in your ivory eyes,
knowing that you were meant for someone better then myself.
Recorded version
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qlQhS24K ... e=youtu.be
glowing upon a new day,
A Goddess left on earth in the wake of Zeus's calamity,
curing the once parched lands,
You are the temptation that no mortal can conjure,
so I stare,
lost in your ivory eyes,
knowing that you were meant for someone better then myself.
Recorded version
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qlQhS24K ... e=youtu.be
Last edited by rootbeer on February 16th, 2013, 12:20 am, edited 2 times in total.
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Re: Zeus's Calamity
The perfect woman? I adore any mention to mythology, and this seems as though when Zeus fell this one lone perfect creature remained. You words read as if you are in awe of her charms and beauty...and sadly you feel you can in no way measure up to her perfection! I bit of deep longing in this piece, things just out of our reach.
A well penned piece, glad I came across this gem!
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A well penned piece, glad I came across this gem!
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Hi. I felt this very much, maybe because you spoke for me in some way. I too loved the mythical references, giving those over-bearing emotions more credence and grandeur. A Goddess I am sure, and her beauty, sometimes, may even be enough, as long as her heart smiles, with or without you. Beautifully written and expressed, a gem.
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Oh! Rootz! I think this tops the list of my favourites from you! AH! I just love it. For one, I'm a massive addict of Greek Mythology and I was excited to see where you were going to take this from the title. And I was completely taken by it. That gorgeous sense of longing, of love, of instant attraction and yet still having that lingering feeling that you're not enough for her. It's a stellar piece of poetry my friend. Colour me very impressed.
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First off, wow that was the fastest I've ever had replies on my poems, thank you so much.
ladymaybebaby - I think every woman is the perfect woman in someone's eyes :D
Mythology was, is my favorite subject. Both Greek and Roman
Tufty - I think my shyness drives my poetry, and life, so i think it hits home in most of my love based poetry.
Lily - I'm glad you liked this. Its one of the harder forums to write in :D
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ladymaybebaby - I think every woman is the perfect woman in someone's eyes :D
Mythology was, is my favorite subject. Both Greek and Roman
Tufty - I think my shyness drives my poetry, and life, so i think it hits home in most of my love based poetry.
Lily - I'm glad you liked this. Its one of the harder forums to write in :D
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Rootbeer
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Rootbeer, I loved this one from the beginning! Congratulations on the spotlight pick of the week! A most well deserved choice! Enjoy the honor, you certainly earned it!
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Ivory Eyes ... Is it like Bette Davis Eyes? Interesting image... I loved the title....
THanx for sharing!
Lebo
THanx for sharing!
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Really a wonderful poem, and well, mythology just keeps drawing us in.A dreamers anthem for sure.Good for you on hitting the spotlight..Well done..Tangie..
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Well penned my friend....congrats on the spotlight.....Whisk
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Wow this took me off guard. I thank you all. I wish all of you well and thanks for the great comments.
Lebo - Ivory as in grey/white eyes like this
Thank you all again
Lebo - Ivory as in grey/white eyes like this
Thank you all again
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Re: Zeus's Calamity
The undertone of longing, angst and silent admiration forms a heady brew. Captured beautifully in a single verse. I enjoy your work Rootz. Congrats on the spotlight.
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Sir Fleshwound - Thank you so much, I am honored. Your interpretation is spot on.
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Re: Zeus's Calamity
One short verse. A few well penned words. You bring us to a mixture of longing and hopelessness, of mere mortal and goddess who will never be together in the eyes of the writer. Though it has been many years, I too was enamored by the Greek/Roman Mythologies, but fear time has stolen a lot of them from my memory. Excellent write. Deserving of the spotlight!
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Yay! *claps* I am so glad this was picked for Spotlight. I loved it the first time and I love it just as much now. You adopt my favourite theme/device for poetey, the greek myths, and do so in a unique and fresh kind of way. This definitely deserves its time in the Spotlight!
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Re: Zeus's Calamity
Ivory Eyes: Galatea was carved from ivory by Pygmalion, as a symbol of perfection, & probably subconciously supplied a little of your inspiration. this is joyful reading...
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You all are too kind. Thank you so much my friends.
John- I think your right, because I do remember that story, how the statue came to life.
John- I think your right, because I do remember that story, how the statue came to life.
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CONGRATULATIONS on the Spotlight rootbeer! There was no more perfect Title for this, it's truly jam packed with such a strong sense of loneliness and longing as many feel when envious of someone that they do not feel they measure up to or cannot garner the love they seek...Beautifully written..you have mad writing skill's my friend....Musie
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As a fan of unrequited love, and love from a distance poetry, this struck a chord with me. I like seeing the sense of grandeur injected by a poet willing to put his subject matter up on a pedestal and play contented second fiddle to the person he admires. Within a relatively short poem I think you needed at least one line worth even more than the sum of its parts and, for me, that line was "(you), glowing upon a new day" - what a superb image!
Congratulations on the spotlight.
Congratulations on the spotlight.
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Ah, that's beautiful!
A beautiful package of poetry with such tender bittersweet emotions, and stunning choice of words!
I love it to bits. Congratulations on the deserved Spotlight!
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A beautiful package of poetry with such tender bittersweet emotions, and stunning choice of words!
I love it to bits. Congratulations on the deserved Spotlight!
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