Monday's Blue(s)

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Monday's Blue(s)

Post by Spence » February 1st, 2013, 10:24 pm

Monday is a marble-break: teeth-ground shooters
Rolling tight under your tongue. It’s better than this silence or
My one white pill. Morpheus is promising I can choose:
A rabbit-hole stumble, with pocket-watch confusions
Or emerging-- a breath kept too long—to a chlorine surface
streaked with sun. I’m sorry I called the school and lied

about being brain-dead or an amputee or just too tired
to hold a pencil. It’s February, it’s the feel of my bedspread,
thick and too heavy to lift or want to. Tomorrow will be better?

Don’t talk about the missing, or miss the talking,
We've got enough fresh scabs to tend here—
Have a bandaid, darling, they’re going cheap.

Low-caffeine headache, coffee-high tremor,
I can feel the sand on the roof of my mouth inside
My eyes, don’t blink, I let the moment go
Home. It’s a voicemail, a stomach knot, I can’t
Listen to either. Hit delete, unstick your throat,

A thick swallow. Hollow. Recline, sticky-eyed,
Bulbous, sick. Tomorrow will be better?
Close the shades, it’s twilight. Close the shades.
It isn't worth it right now.



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Prompt Eight


I was of three minds,
Like a tree
In which there are three blackbirds.

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Re: Monday's Blue(s)

Post by ladylilith » February 2nd, 2013, 3:40 am

Oh gee! You get me every time. Just as a small side, I LOVE the Matrix reference right there.. I've been taking issue with Trinity, with anyone that will hear, lately. Heh.

But anyway! Back the poetry. And damn, it is fine poetry on display here. It's the monday blues alright, but it's as though every day is monday for this speaker. The light of day just too much to bear, maybe tomorrow, maybe the next. But forever feeling unattached, and rough as hell.

Wonderful work. Enviable work even. Thank you for sharing it.. I might have to have a go at some of these prompts.

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Post by ladymaybebaby » February 2nd, 2013, 11:14 am

This is my absolute favorite, hands down! I love this bite in this piece... these lines here just over the top perfection! I’m sorry I called the school and lied

about being brain-dead or an amputee or just too tired
to hold a pencil. It’s February, it’s the feel of my bedspread,
thick and too heavy to lift or want to. Tomorrow will be better?

Lil and I are like school girls fighting for the spot of number one fan! Two girls, both with the suberb taste...
Bookmarked for sure!

Love this!
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Re: Monday's Blue(s)

Post by ladymaybebaby » February 10th, 2013, 11:18 am

I loved it the first time, my bookmarked collection lets me read it and enjoy it at will, now just want to say congratulations on the spotlight, this piece is awesome and most deserving! A great piece, Spence!

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Re: Monday's Blue(s)

Post by Lebo » February 10th, 2013, 3:32 pm

This really sets up the mood for the blues ...Especially the Mundays ... Loved the 1st verse ... It had an 'Alice in Wonderland' flavor to it... Good job!
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Re: Monday's Blue(s)

Post by tangerinepie » February 10th, 2013, 10:30 pm

Hi..I really liked the trippy wording, it had a bit of hip hop flavor, the way the words just hard hitting streamed on.Very original..Great highlight choice..Tangie..


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Post by Whiskurz » February 10th, 2013, 11:31 pm

I too liked this piece....congrats on the spotlight......Whisk



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Re: Monday's Blue(s)

Post by Rassy48 » February 12th, 2013, 8:45 am

Spence,
Just a wonderful way to engulf about every reason for "Monday's Blue(s)". Man ... you're better than Ferris Bueller! Seriously, your references to "The Matrix, to Alice in Wonderland, too tired to hold a pencil", just super word usage. I love it. I missed this the first time around, but so glad I caught here, in the Spotlight, right where it belongs! Congrats, my friend.
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Post by ladylilith » February 12th, 2013, 7:16 pm

Bravo! It's a pleasure to revisit this. Congrats on the Spotlight, I felt this was a fine piece of poetry and I still do. See? That 365 days of poetry is totally working out for you! Tee hee.

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Re: Monday's Blue(s)

Post by JohnFeddeler » February 13th, 2013, 7:57 pm

it's the voicemails & the emails & the cuts for which they don't make enough bandaids. & it's the urge to be productive. & it's the coffee. it's really the coffee...


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Re: Monday's Blue(s)

Post by Valentine » February 13th, 2013, 9:38 pm

Called the school and lkied or are you just brain fried?



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Post by musie » February 14th, 2013, 8:36 am

Spence~this was ABSOLUTELY AWESOME! Jam packed with creative imagery and so telling of one who's suffer's from depression..I could identify with so much of this....Congratulation's on the Spotlight..Most Deserving...Musie


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Re: Monday's Blue(s)

Post by everhopeful » February 14th, 2013, 11:09 am

I know this feeling for sure, but have never been able to describe it with the poetic flair on display here! It's almost saddening that something so filled with the blues should make me smile, but that's only a testament to the quality of the poetry - plus, monday miseries like company! I love how this started out so flowing and expansive, and much like the content, every last drop of enthusiasm faded into staccato, too-tired-to-speak, malaise.
Excellent work, congratulations on the spotlight.



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Re: Monday's Blue(s)

Post by the quiet poet » February 15th, 2013, 2:29 pm

Beautiful. Very nice flow to it.. so sad...


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Re: Monday's Blue(s)

Post by created2write » February 16th, 2013, 8:24 pm

It's like you gathered up the various sentiments held world wide and melded them into one understanding of what Monday can be like, but more, life. Congratulations!


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