Dead god

[sleepingsun1]

The moors were so quiet
One could hear their own footsteps
Tapping against the ancient gravel track
And above, the moon, half full
Half glowing glaringly in conception stared down
Then was engulfed by the mists and fog
Yet we stared for a while, she stared back.

The candle was lit and she came
You came back to me, the moon brightened
Blugeoned, white, pure, and you came
Carressed my skin again as it burnt
Then when it went out, you went with
The moon, the moon.

I cried. I could not stand
The end of one who had been like you
Stalwart and steadfast in belief
The stars peeped through the clouds, comforted me

Stillness, silence
A dead earth for a dead God
Yearning for a return at dawn
Nothing roamed, no raven called
An omen through the darkness, no birds buried
Their ever living past in their song, and sang for it
No moor sheep shook their head in the gold, and bleated
There was a silence that we drank in, that makes
Every noise everything, emphasised, like an eclipse of our perceptions.

Then the fog came
Thicker and faster, flying
Through air, thick, laid its claws
In to the earth, in to our eyes, blinded us
Mistified around us and lay in the dark, hiding
Showing just how weak and fearful we are
Showing us death, death and the unknown of it
The mystical death, the beyond life, the unknown
So it showed us, and the Goddess Moon
Saw it, remembered Her old lover, fled and prayed
The God would be remade
But I cannot wish that for my dead.

[ladylilith]

This holds all the eerie romance and desperation of Wuthering Heights for me. It's that sense of wandering the misty, troubled moorland, where nature seems to reflect the inner emotions too. A really effective piec eof poetry in that you not only create a scenic-scape for the reader to jump into, but you have such a lovely way with phrasing. It's lightly melancholic, not too heavy as to weigh you down, but lamenting, mournful maybe.

Ah!

I just truly enjoyed this, despite the tragic overtones.

Lily^^

[QuietAstronomer]

Nicely done.
Dark elements, cold moments.
A lamenting tale that is well wrought.

thanks for sharing.


QA

[Jahaliel]

*shivers*

Really nice work, you had me caught up and far away with your words. Very well done.

[tangerinepie]

A complex writing that has to be absorbed slowly, for it has so many aspects of interest.It has an eerie ambiance to it, that is enjoyable..Nice..Tangie..

[reveriebliss]

Wow this was written with such care and tenderness. I feel each movement. Beautifully crafted!

[ladymaybebaby]

Congratultions on the spotlight pick, much deserved after reading this piece! I've never seen a 'moor', but your imagery was so spot on... I think I've got a good idea of what everything looks like now. I beautiful piece!
Much enjoyed!

-LMB
xoxo

[Sasha]

I just love your mix of melancholy and love in such beautiful visual imagery with those foggy images od death, affection, longing... the last line is just brilliant!
Wonderful work, and worthy Spotlight. Congratulations!

Sash

[Eccles]

Congratulations! I was caught up in the words of this poem, and I can only echo the words of the previous reviews.
A beautiful piece of work.

Thank you for sharing it.

Eccleds

[musie]

I have to echo what Tangie has said about how complex this piece of work is. You really worked the imagination of the reader with both the formatting and word behavior...It's hauntingly beautiful...A very much deserved Spotlight...CONGRATULATIONS! ...Musie

[tangerinepie]

I am so elated I had a chance to read this again.It is so dream like in many ways and the theme I found beautiful..A wonderful spotlight choice..Tangie..

[SirFleshwound]

A mystical and pagan air your words create. It spoke to me of almost Arthurian legend and captivated my attention to the end. Bravo and congratulations.

[E.S.]

What could I say that hasn't been said? Absolutely blown back. Great one!

[inflames]

I love the tragic flavour to this piece. It reads darkly- which adore. Congrats on a well deserved spotlight!

[Ladywildalice]

Congratulations for the Spotlight. Much enjoyed this well completed piece. Very good work here.

[BlackVelvetRose]

first off congratulation on this spotlight. This is a well deserving piece. The careful rendering of this absolutely blew me away. Thank you for sharing. :)