Cold Silence

[trekay1234]

This world, silent and still

I feel a breath of cold, chilling my heart


What is love without the person to love?

What is passion with no one to give it to?


My soul was given to you

My heart, now submerged in a void of nothingness

I have no more tears to cry

No more energy to move


Without your love engulfing me

And smothering me


Even with all the millions of people

With all the riches in the world
It means nothing without you by my side


Where are you?
Are you hiding?

Are you happy...


Without me


This world would be nothing without the sheer happiness

Of love


The love of before
The love of which passion ripped through me like flames licking up precious wood

The love I gave you, you took, never to return back to me


This world was meant for lovers, not one by itself

Lovers once we were

Lovers we are not


The void grows to become empty and cold

This world is silent, still


No flames of passion to give warmth
No one person to share the riches of heartbeats with

I, myself, have disappeared from the glass surface of humanity 

Into the void of darkness


Along with my heart

Wounded and shivering 
I cradle her like a crying child, tender and sweet


In this silent emptiness 

[Etchers]

I think you will get mixed opinions about the piece. It initially comes across like a teenager crying for their first love but grows from that into something quite brilliant. The way it's phrased and structured is just awesome. A great piece... seriously this is awesome.

[generictruth]

I absolutely adored this poem. The metaphors were brilliant, the message was all to relateable. The words were capturing. It was indeed "awesome"

[trekay1234]

Thank you very much! :D I'm not used to doing long poetry, so this was a little bit of an experiment.

Cheers.

[Dew]

Very beautiful...I really loved the line: "The love of which passion ripped through me like flames licking up precious wood
"...that brought delicious mental images...even among sad longing. - Dew

[trekay1234]

I'm glad you enjoyed it, thank you! :D

[musie]

trekay~I don't believe I've read you before, so I will first welcome you to TPS....I thought this to be a brilliantly written piece from your pen....I too liked the line that Dew pointed out, but I think my favorite image was the in the last stanza...

"Along with my heart

Wounded and shivering
I cradle her like a crying child, tender and sweet
"

So heart wrenching in it's depth of Sadness and loss of such tender feeling's of a love that once was....Musie

[ladymaybebaby]

Welcome to TPS and congrats on the spotlight choice! As I read this, it seemed like you wove feelings of honesty into a deep and metaphorical piece of poetry. It was a tender and gentle use of language to tell the tale of something so sad and tinged with longing and lonliness, so many unanwered questions... the ' if only factor'! Brilliantly handled! Thank you for this one, it was a most enjoyable read...

-LMB
xoxo

[Lonnie]

A nice poem to read aloud! Congrats on Spotlight!

[musie]

CONGRATULATIONS on the Spotlight with this one! Most deserving..it was a pleasure to read it again...Musie

[songofmeadow]

Congratulations on the spotlight, a poem that draws the reader in from the title, which is open to interpretation through strong visuals and metaphor to the oh so sad ending, well done, meadow

[Sasha]

I echo Meadow about the title, definitely grabs the attention, and the content has the same effect.
Beautifully done! Congratulation on the Spotlight!

Sash

[tangerinepie]

I also must add my congrats on this truly soulful poem.To me it was all about the writing, the great visuals created, and how it expressed your loss..Memorable..Ty..T..

[inflames]

This sends shivers down my spine. Wonderful tone to this. A beautiful spotlight piece! Congrats!

[knpoet]

Congratulations on the Spotlight, trekay1234, I missed this the first time around! This piece really pulls on the heartstrings, very eloquently put!

Kathy

[Hem]

I echo the sentiments expressed above. This is exceptional and plays out a range of emotion and expression.

[the quiet poet]

I could feel everything. I feel the same. I feel cold.

[trekay1234]

Thank you for all these lovely comments!
Sorry I've been gone, many things have affected me personally, but I'm back with many new pieces!