Seimei soshite Zetsumei (Life and Death)

[AgentofChaos]

Her serene smile,
The Yin to the Yang,
Of your furrowed visage.

*The birth of my niece after the passing of my father.
She would have been his world.

[everhopeful]

Although this is very minimal in terms of length, there is so much said with so few words that it feels as complete as a poem with 10 times as many words. The form is perfect, two images set apart at opposite sides, both metaphorically speaking and in terms of their juxtaposition within the poem, balanced by the yin and yang reference.
Superb, for sure.

[TheSoundOfSoul]

Very touching write with few words, but it's effective nonetheless.

[Sendarian]

great sadness juxtaposed with great joy, compounding each emotion with these few words. Where one life ends, a new life begins. Yet I feel the writer's deep regret for the parent never knowing the grandchild.

[platinummoon]

Beautiful. I bet your father would have loved your poem.

[ladymaybebaby]

With great sadness, bring great joy they say... hmmm I've never really bought into that. I'm more of with the great joy, I think if only Mom and Dad were around to see this how happy they would be.... and that is what I got from this piece. Not to take anything away from the new baby, it's such a bittersweet feeling that I know all to well... and it made me connect to this piece instantly! I even shed a tear or two, for your father and for you. Beautifully done and much deserving of the spotlight pick... congratulations!

-LMB
xoxo

[YoursTrulyZsa]

Excellent write!!! I love the footnote too...my daughter was born 2 weeks before cancer took my grandfather...he met her briefly, but I know she would have been his favorite by far! A beautifully written piece...sometimes you say the most by saying barely anything at all!

Zsa

[AgentofChaos]

I'm honored that this was chosen for a spotlight and by each comment.

The sadness is deeply felt for a parent who will never know his grandchild.

[Sendarian]

congrats

You are deserving

[Larsen M. Callirhoe]

said poem is very deserving of the spotlight if just for the reason of the nature of the sad poem, content of poem, and the transparency of the juxtaposition in said poem regarding life and death in one short swoop. well inked.

victor

[Robert Haigh]

A well-articulated piece, making each word count. And the whole turns out to be more than the sum of its parts. Excellent! Thanks for sharing.

[tangerinepie]

Minimalism at it's finest..a very refreshing poem that tells an entire story..Best wishes on this delightful spotlight choice..Tangie..

[everhopeful]

Without taking anything away from the sadness of the poem, it's a pleasure to see this one again, especially in the spotlight where it belongs. I think it's conclusive proof that a short poem can convey so much with a couple of solid images and smart presentation.
Congratulations on the spotlight!

[Josie]

Minimalism is well illustrated in this special moment. I like the simplicity of your poem. Do you need 'of'?
This was a fine selection for the TPS Spotlight.

[Pinta77]

"The Yin to the Yang"

it gives this an almost comforting feeling. While it's sad, it just feels like everything will be ok. One loved one is lost, and another one is born. This is sad, but at the same time heart warming.

[trell11]

AgentofChaos very descriptive without description. Begs the reader to identify a thought and personalize it. Placement of wording and punctuation shows dichotomy and rationalizes the use of words. Very spotlight worthy. Congratz and good work my friend.