When the Object is the Subject

[astroannie]

"You made me do it!"
His voice an iron whisper
tears stain the pillow.

[godsplat]

Hello astroannie

The last line kind of hits you!

godsplat

[platinummoon]

This is dramatic stuff. Do I hear a man accuse his wife of it being her own fault that he hit her? Afterwards she cries in her pillow.

[Sasha]

I love the clever play on 'subject' and 'object', this is heavy stuff, something doing something to the thing itself, maybe with the help of outside effect as well.
Hard-hitting piece of work!

Sash

[astroannie]

Just a friendly note to thank you all for reading. This is from something I read. The idea that "you" the subject is really being treated as an object and not a person. It's about the objectification of women in general and those in hurtful situations like this in particular. One of the other folks who helps out with our non-profit works at a shelter as her day job.

[jainrohit]

Astroannie , this jolted me ..... A small picturisation but with a deep intended effect for a sane emotional person .... Differ as they may , but each interpretation of this shall carry the desired effect. Sharing the object's emotions ......

[Necmiye]

Awful subject--brutality of some form against a woman, whether it's beating or rape---but very well penned. Calling attention to the objectification of the subject gives this some feminist strength.

[Jim]

voluminous vioce in this piece.
masterful

[everhopeful]

For me it's the 'iron whisper' which carries so much of the weight here, especially in context with what he says. That metaphor tells us just how his words are spoken, with a mixture of denial and violent accusation, reprimanding her for causing her own pain.
Graphic and emotive work, congratulations on the spotlight.

[dornicks]

A very impactful write on what may be an all too common occurence. Good to hear it aired. Thank you for sharing this and congrats on the Spotlight.

dornicks

[inflames]

Annie, I have really missed reading your work. This is a lovely reminder of how brilliant you are. Congrats on the spotlight!

[astroannie]

Thank you all for reading and commenting.

Especial thank you to whomever nominated me for the Spotlight ... because it put this back in front of more and different eyeballs.