Safe Harbor

[icelandicblue]

Salt spray fills the air
we cut through the wild whitecaps
toward the white boned sand.

[Reason A.]

A nice senryu with a hint of alliteration to boot.
Is there a reason for the punctuation/capital?

[godsplat]

Hello icelandicblue and welcome to The Poet Sanctuary

I wish I was there with you, great poem!!

godsplat

[icelandicblue]

Thanks for the review. The punctuation is based on places to pause. I don't start each line with a capital letter because I think of this as one breath or thought.

[icelandicblue]

godsplat,

Thanks so much and I too wish I were there. Thanks for the nice welcome.

[ladylynnmary]

Dearest icelandicblue, wow what a beautiful image this brought into my mind. I too wanted to be there as
well. A great write and welcome to TPS

Much Love,
ladylynnmary

[jack137]

Blue this is like a dream and I hope I don't wake up for a while.

[entwife]

lovely scene you've made here. haiku is like a poem in one breath. no need to use capitals or punctuation in them though.

[konch]

Really nice haiku -- a real world image, in the moment, suggesting season, with deep ineffable feeling.

[jainrohit]

this haiku has a nice passage of time encoded into it ...... Salty spray ..... White bone sand ..... Marvellous

[Reason A.]

Thanks, entwife, for the reply. many haiku writers don't capitalize any word (except people/place names) and offer no punctuations at all. Just wondered. I am not a purist when it comes to any poetry. Enjoyed the piece.

[queenjellybean]

This was very clear and incredibly vivid, with a freshness and liveliness to it. I could definitely image this scene in my head. I'm really glad I got the opportunity to read this, fabulous work!

[astroannie]

I could almost taste the salt ......lovely

[Baywriter]

Loved the vivid imagery in this one. Wonderful work. Congrats on the spotlight!

Bay

[icelandicblue]

Thank you all so very much for such a warm welcome. I truly appreciate your enthusiasm for this piece.

[allmirth]

Reading this I felt like I was there. Wonderfully vivid! Congratulations on the Spotlight!

Thanks so much for sharing.
Mirthy

[icelandicblue]

Thanks everyone for your kind words!

[dornicks]

Congratulations on the Spotlight. I felt the spray in my eyes. Thank you for sharing this,

dornicks

[tangerinepie]

Hi..You created a haunting image that is lovely..A well chosen spotlight choice..Tangie..

[everhopeful]

With such a premium on word choice it's always impressive to see how well someone can build an image in a short space. A couple of very well placed and selected words make all the difference and turn this into a vivid piece.
Congratulations on the spotlight!