Spectrum

[TheManInTheSuit]

Spectrum

I--
I,
chase these bitter lies,
I--
I,
drape my skin in dye,
but where is my,
where is the
spectrum in my head,
no color, no color,
I'm the painted dead
And still I fight, whoa still I fight
in this season so damn long,
oh at night I cry,
I'd be better gone.

We--
we,
stitch our hearts again,
We--
we,
stab each other's friend,
oh how do I,
how can I
fight this pounding in my head,
No, no color in my,
I'm the painted dead
Oh and still I try, oh how I try
in this season so damn long,
no wondering why,
I'd be better gone.

I--
I,
chase new lies again,
I--
I,
pray to find the end,
where can it, oh,
where is the
spring of living color,
why, oh why, must I
bury my loving brother,
yeah still I try,
oh and I still fight
these echoes in my head,
no color, no color,
I'm the painted dead
So here I lie, yes I cry
in this season so damn long,
oh wondering why,
my life is all but gone.

[ladymaybebaby]

I love the different ways you used the title 'spectrum in this piece'. The color, the seasons, your mood, it all fit together so perfectly. I really liked the line about the no color, no color, but you are painted dead. That like totally stood out for me. I found it so hauting and sad and full of emptiness on the part of the speaker. A very strong emotive write, I enjoyed this one immensely! Well done!

-LMB
xoxo

[everhopeful]

It was the delivery of this one which really captured my eye, the deliberately faltering, stuttering use of repetition made it feel very grounded and real, yet well suited to performance. The use of colour was excellent, I was drawn to the element which showed that the speaker needed to feel theirs from within, rather than just something painted on. It spoke to me of the big difference between what you feel and what you present to the world.
This one had something a little bit different about it, and I like it.

[True~Reflection]

I couldn't help but sense a lyrical quality to this piece. It was really well done. I like the repetition and the back and forth from 'I', to 'we' and back to 'I' again. It really felt like this piece was dragging the reader through a colorless spectrum and I feel like that makes this a really powerful piece. Very nicely done.

[TheManInTheSuit]

Thank you much for the responses, they are really appreciated.

[Simran]

So poignant, so colourless(!) and so so beautiful!! What a spectrum of emotions!
Congratulations on the well earned Spotlight!
Simran :-)

[rupertpupkin]

Hi, I thought this was a wonderful piece of writing. Almost seemed like a song to me and I found myself hearing it sung when reading it. Super work and a very deserving spotlight, well done and enjoy, Sean.

[E.S.]

5/5. Excellent.

[inflames]

This has a very solemn tune to it, but it's excellent work. It's very poignant. Wonderful work! Congrats on your spotlight.

[everhopeful]

I remember reading this one the first time around and being so struck by the way it was written in a stuttering style - it was quite awkward to take in, but when I got into the poem I found it to be a brilliant way of enhancing the feel of the words themselves. I see how some others picked up on a song-like quality to this, but I think that even with the board-crossing potential it has found a most suitable home now!
Congratulations on the spotlight!

[songofmeadow]

I thought this wonderful poem must have come via songwriters such is the musicality of it but reading comments possibly not, either way it is compelling reading and a worthy spotlight winner mx

[flux]

Very original, and many stand out lines. Definitely a work of the heart, only something intuitive can be this original.

[allmirth]

This does have the quality of a performance piece or a song.A most original and creative write. Congratulations on the Spotlight.

Thanks so much for sharing.
Mirthy