"Angel"

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"Angel"

Post by PinkBalloon » August 2nd, 2013, 10:08 am

I found myself kneeling between
a simple wish and a gentle daydream.
He was hanging from seven rows of fairy lights:
A single soul dipped in the beauty of the night.

Like a floating lantern above a dark road,
he was shining with all the stars that heaven could hold.
An angel with his feet on the ground.
I was lost for words but finally found.



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Re: "Angel"

Post by AliMariesDad » August 2nd, 2013, 10:48 am

Beautifully written! This metaphor has a wonderful rhythm complemented by nice rhymes and vivid imagery. Great poem.
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Re: "Angel"

Post by candlewitch » August 2nd, 2013, 12:17 pm

hello and welcome to The Poet Sanctuary! It is very nice to meet you. This is the first poem of yours I've read and I must tell you, I found it delightful! Such wonderful imagery! I liked these lines best:


Like a floating lantern above a dark road,
he was shining with all the stars that heaven could hold.

always, Cat


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Re: "Angel"

Post by PinkBalloon » August 2nd, 2013, 12:41 pm

Hi AMD!

Thank you very much for the kind words! I really appreciate it!



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Re: "Angel"

Post by PinkBalloon » August 2nd, 2013, 12:51 pm

Hi Cat!

Thanks for the welcome! And yes, this is the first poem that I've posted on TPS. Thank you for the lovely words!



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Re: "Angel"

Post by Rainman » August 2nd, 2013, 1:09 pm

I enjoyed this, it had a balletic lightness of touch and enchanting imagery.

Well done.



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Re: "Angel"

Post by punkywmc » August 2nd, 2013, 4:03 pm

beautifully put. it flows nice and the rhyme and feeling behind it take me back to when i first met my soul mate . excited to read more of your work hun :)



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Re: "Angel"

Post by freedomsoldier » August 2nd, 2013, 10:30 pm

great rhyme scheme, gave the poem a nice flow. well thought out though the small amount of words.



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Re: "Angel"

Post by Sumit Datta » August 3rd, 2013, 11:48 am

nice poem with beautiful word choice and rhymes....



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Re: "Angel"

Post by E.S. » August 3rd, 2013, 2:53 pm

The rhyming really enables the reader to be engrossed easily and the word choice and imagery is top notch. Great piece 5/5.



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Re: "Angel"

Post by bandgeekfreak » August 3rd, 2013, 10:35 pm

Oh wow, this is really beautiful. Great write, the title fits it perfectly.


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Re: "Angel"

Post by allmirth » August 6th, 2013, 4:16 pm

Welcome to TPS!

You paint the emotions with a lovely delicate grace.

Thanks much for sharing.
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Re: "Angel"

Post by Zojourn » August 7th, 2013, 5:32 am

Nice (w)rite PB. Beautiful, it brings forth compelling passion in its truest form.


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Re: "Angel"

Post by musie » August 7th, 2013, 5:54 am

Hi PinkBalloon~I too Welcome you to TPS! The imagery throughout this piece was so endearing and just exquisite, truly fresh... wonderfully romantic and tender write for any love...thoroughly enjoyed and I look forward to more from you....Musie


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Re: "Angel"

Post by SilentTears » August 31st, 2017, 4:02 pm

Beautiful, simple, and sparkling. I can feel the warmth here, that special warmth you always get at the beginning of something special.


I let the sun on my skin.
Pretend I don't burn
I'm not burning here.
I just lay ash
On my eyelids,
And rub it deep into my
Bones.


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