Fullcrumbed

[jeremyf]

Balance is always about.

Dependably defineable
somewhere
[space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space]out
[space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space]there.

That certainfindable centerline
Alloweing all the ugly shapes
-ones with gnarl and kraggs-
To share asit atop.
Harmonious allingment
Meaning nothing more than
[space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space]balance..

Until ineverablely,

Huge tsunami wave or
Just the even breeze
Hard topples all intoo
LeftOvers and crumbs.




*a/n. poem inspired by the artwork of Michael Grab, and yes all spelling is intentional

[D.Lawrence]

What a fascinating piece. I drew from it a sense of regulation being unnecessary in one sense, and yet, in another way, a source of stability. For me, your spelling was poignant to this personal understanding. I'm sure I'm not entirely or even closely done with this piece, though. Thank you for sharing!

All good wishes,
-Declan

[ladymaybebaby]

Okay I always love inspiration from any source... The lines of the tsunami and the gentle breeze are wonderful.. showing both at the same time how fragile and strong we can be. I guess it depends on the circumstance. Balance is a lovely idea, yet for some of us it's just a pipe dream. Your work is always so original and outside of the box and I dig that about you! ( inserted Jerry Maguire quote right there ) Seriously, totally cool sadness work, always a pleasure to do business with you!!!

-Jasmine
xoxo

[bandgeekfreak]

I sometimes get inspiration from other places too....okay most of the time. But this is a really well written piece, it's a great message too.

[miharu]

To me, this piece almost begs the reader to find balance between the message of the author and the spelling choices within... At least, that is what it begs of the spelling/grammar nazi inside mimi! (:

If I must select... these lines were my favorites.
"Alloweing all the ugly shapes
-ones with gnarl and kraggs-
To share asit atop."
I loved the play on words in the phrase "asit atop."

[everhopeful]

I had to look up the work of Mr Grab, and it was a worthwhile venture out to find it, as it certainly helped my understanding of your poem, as well as being nice to look at too!
It's a really unusual approach to a sadness poem, because the slightly whimsical feel of the opening only adds to the pleasing message, one of how everything can find a place, find its centre, and come together with others in harmony. However the ending shows that all of the work to find the centre can come tumbling down under the slightest change of conditions.
I always dig it when you pitch something from leftfield at us like this.

[karrie]

I love how this pulled me in with a gentle tug. There is just so much that leaps out at meCongratulations on the well deserved Spotlight!

[Windsend]

Great poem. A most deserving pick for the TPS spotlight. Great wordplay and imagery.

[UlfvarrOT]

I immensely enjoyed reading this. It shows your mastery of English. Great job

[everhopeful]

Really diggin' another chance to enjoy this one, and while I'd recommend everyone checks out the artist who inspired it for a little bit of additional context, you actually manage to convey the message without it being a necessity.
What struck me about the spelling is actually how little of a distraction it was, even though parts stand out as not looking quite right. Somehow it makes sense and imitates the precarious balance of the artwork, which similarly looks like it should fall apart.
Yet for all of that balance, sometimes a natural disaster or a gentle breeze can make the hard work topple.
A superb piece, congratulations on the spotlight!

[Josie]

With your unique manipulation of white space, the image of balance was well portrayed. I enjoyed the spelling word play and if losing balance meant becoming fullcrumbed, I couldn't help chuckling. Thank you for sharing and congratulations on the TPS Spotlight.

[Philip16]

We look for balance, for the ideal, we struggle and strain and get a glimpse and then...BOOM!!! Gone.
Fantastic write and so well deserving!
Philip16