Destiny's End

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Re: Destiny's End

Post by Josie » August 14th, 2013, 6:29 pm

Thank you for sharing your Destiny's End. The image of the river illustrates the movement of time in a special way. As we live life, the river allows us to delve into memories, spend time in the present, but we eventually have to keep moving toward our own destiny.


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Re: Destiny's End

Post by ladymaybebaby » August 14th, 2013, 7:42 pm

Cat,

What can I say that has not already been said about this beautiful piece? I am so glad to see this one in the spotlight, it is a beautiful write. Enjoy your turn in the spotlight, congratulations, it is much deserved!

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Re: Destiny's End

Post by StreamofAether » August 15th, 2013, 3:33 am

Looks like I'm late to the party. I, too enjoy the extended metaphor in this piece. In response to Ladywildalice, I think as one grows older, you are more aware of life and the infinite currents you could have floated on (to clumsily add to the metaphor). This keen awareness, I believe, and the myriad of life experiences one has attained through the decades, makes each passing moment that much more ephemeral. Anyway, great work on this, hope all is well.


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Re: Destiny's End

Post by Mizuchi » August 15th, 2013, 4:52 am

I like how this poem goes in multiple directions at once, even musing about photographs as a side note, which subtly casts doubt on the linearity of the river. For a short piece, you said so much...



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Re: Destiny's End

Post by musie » August 16th, 2013, 4:13 am

Candlewitch~CONGRATULATION'S on a Well Deserved Spotlight! I can only echo what has already been said about this exquisite piece from your pen....It's short but is chalk full of truth about how life truly is..Such a joy to read a great piece of writing like this.....Once again Congrat's! Musie


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Re: Destiny's End

Post by candlewitch » August 16th, 2013, 12:30 pm

Thank You to everyone who responded to this poem. I am deeply appreciative of your comments!

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Re: Destiny's End

Post by bandgeekfreak » August 16th, 2013, 7:34 pm

Breathtaking, that's the only word that fits this. Just breathtaking.


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Re: Destiny's End

Post by Paulette » August 17th, 2013, 10:46 am

This is really nice ... kind of soothing. Personal preference? I'd love to see some rhyme, but it does flow and there's some good imagery.


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Re: Destiny's End

Post by Sasha » August 17th, 2013, 2:28 pm

I love extended metaphors, and this one is a wonderful example!
Indeed, time passes by us, at first we move along, and at other times we wish we could go back in time, but there will come a time when it moves alone without us!
I, as well, like "earthy vessels", and you just did a great job with this one!
Congratulations on the Spotlight!

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Re: Destiny's End

Post by dornicks » August 17th, 2013, 3:10 pm

Congratulations on the Spotloght with this fine write,a pleasure to read. Thank you for sharing this,

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Re: Destiny's End

Post by candlewitch » August 18th, 2013, 11:01 am

Thank you bandgeekfreak, Sasha and Dornicks!


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