Sorrowful Maiden
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Pack up your floaty dresses
and your otherworldly air,
put away your pale complexion
and your gestures of despair.
No handsome vampire comes to call,
no prince leaves you folorn,
there are no stolen kisses
nor sweet partings at the dawn.
You do not languish by the stream
beneath a willow tree,
and your name is not Morgana
it is Sallyanne McGee.
and your otherworldly air,
put away your pale complexion
and your gestures of despair.
No handsome vampire comes to call,
no prince leaves you folorn,
there are no stolen kisses
nor sweet partings at the dawn.
You do not languish by the stream
beneath a willow tree,
and your name is not Morgana
it is Sallyanne McGee.
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Re: Sorrowful Maiden
As one who has ethereal days and owns several floaty numbers I had to laugh at myself through your poem, well judged. Now I have some languishing to do mx
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Cool -Laughing.
And what a slam!!!
Super job.
QA
And what a slam!!!
Super job.
QA
Three for one will get it done.
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Re: Sorrowful Maiden
Dearest Rainman, oh my god this is funny! Thanks I needed a good laugh.
Much Love,
Lynn
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Re: Sorrowful Maiden
Very clever little number and I thought that the poem flowed so well. Thanks for sharing.
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Too many live in a fantasy world in their own minds. Convincing yourself that you are something other than what you truly are will lead you down a road to misery and painful confrontation eventually. Unfortunately, some poor minds and souls, never are able to see their confused plight. We are all JUST who we are. And once we accept that we CAN be the best version of ourselves by being truthful, joyful, accepting, encouraging, sharing, caring, and educated, we will find our lives become much more fulfilling. Excellent write and Congrats on the Spotlight.
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I loved the lyrical rhythmic flow of the poem. One small point ... who is this Sallyanne McGee ? I've googled, yahood and ask'd ... Is she a 'pigment of your imagination' - whatever, you've painted a pretty good picture of her. Thanks a lot.
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This made me think of my own self in times when I used all these Things in my own thoughts.
Yes, I Guess each woman has a cinderella phase or maybe men have a cinder fella thing!
Lovely poem you have written, good flow of Words!
Kornelia
Yes, I Guess each woman has a cinderella phase or maybe men have a cinder fella thing!
Lovely poem you have written, good flow of Words!
Kornelia
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Never! BECAUSE I'm Sally McGee! Own it! Lol, loved the idea and poem! Congrats.
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Ah, Rainman ...
This is wonderful! So glad you wrote it, it makes me smile!
This is wonderful! So glad you wrote it, it makes me smile!
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This was a delightful moment of reading, Narrator's tone was perfect, like a mother or a grandmother trying to snap the daydreamer back to reality. Congratulations on the TPS Spotlight.
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This is awesome. Love the pacing and the tone to this poem. Great work! Congrats on your spotlight.
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lol... and congrats on the spotlight..... very funny..... made me laugh when you named every average airhead teenage sally mcgee.
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